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im feelin this. its thoughtful, kinda scary really. good creativity. luvin the rhymin.
{As I die drowning in this doom, burdened with spiteful sin
This is my rightful end, sliding to Hell when the sky falls in}
that was my favorite part... luv your words... keep writing
aiite last bump n im out
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I liked the phrase, battalion of reptilian guards. It had a good sound, and worked where it was placed. Having a religious aspect didn't seem forced. Solid use of a question to end the piece. Structure was straight. Being specific with colors helped with imagery.
Thanks for hitting up my piece.
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this was a good peice good choice in wordplay could use more vocabs and a pretty good flow keep it up
yo that was crazy man o mean that in a good way keep up the good work
:emerge: aiite good looks.. you could elaborate a little more on the feeed tho
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