pretty simple...needs elevation...your rhyme scheme was decent...your vocab and your wordplay were simple....you need some multis....and some complexity wouldnt hur either...keep elevatin.~1`
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pretty simple...needs elevation...your rhyme scheme was decent...your vocab and your wordplay were simple....you need some multis....and some complexity wouldnt hur either...keep elevatin.~1`
yo it was straight, it had some good lines to it, had some good structure. all in all i think it was pretty good.
keep doin your things and uppin, i feel you, im in like 5 battles that need closin rite now too, but anyway, it was decent, keep doin your think l8r 1
what lets battle
Tight Shit J
rise......for feedback
That was some crazy shit hommie, this is so true too...im going to be reading ur shit alot now..
yo how the fuck do u make new threads
If you look me straight in the eye i will make u cry... if u step up to my face i will make u look like a disgrace... i got the flow and i got ur hoe... bitch wanna fight i will hit u and ur eyes will b so fuckin tight...
Nyce Verse, It Was Pretty Simplistic Though. Adding Witty Lyrics Could Help
up for feed back...kinda old but still...leave some feed back and let me know something
i probably gotta fanatic/
waitin upstairs in the attic/
with it atomatic callin me up there/
my man stand with a guage in his hand/
stakin my house out in a tan tented Sedan/
blow yo mouth out til you cant finish a dam/
ham sandwich, or you cant spinich your spam/
sip through a straw, shoplift through the mall/
picture me on yo moms living room wall/
hey ma, maybe ill give you a call/
syck you fuc*in bitc* suck a dic* and two balls/
Ain't nobody messin with me
I got this
u fuckin suck yo......uppin this shit....if anybody wanna colab on a open mic leave me a pm or something i'm lookin to do i new oneQuote:
Originally Posted by Midwest Killa
i can agree with that...but the part not touched was the adressing of the topic i think u have a great imagination trojecting it may need help but never the less it was there you have the idea and painted it well.we all can always elivate just hitthat thought hard rewrite this one time and i think you'd have a dime peace easy.Quote:
Originally Posted by Vortex
thanx....uppin
peep my crew collab tell me what you think if you might be interested in collabing