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Damn Son, This Piece Was Really Deep Man I Like The Story Line Here It Was On The Right Track Like You Was Writing A Book. Very Emotional Man, The Imagery Was Really Good Dawg, You Had Some Good Vocabulary Here.Alot Of This Words Had A Good Meaning To Em I'm Glad To See There's More Ppl Writing Life Stories Like Mine, Then Writing This False Claims Of Rhymes. But Really The Emotion On This Piece Just Blew Me out The Water Man, Very Good Shit Here, Keep Em Dropping Hope To Collab With You Soon Now, I Know Alot About You Dawg, Just Like you Know Alot About Me. Good Shit Man Holla At Me
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wow.. i really did like this O.M. man.. it is really nice.. like seriously.. flow was off at times but its cool cuz u make it up with the good emotion n lyrics u used in here.. i really liked it.. usually i dont like to read OM's n i didnt even wanna read thsi one lol but than after reading the first verse i was like wow good thing i read this lol. .very dope piece man like seriously much props.. shyt i hope u aint better than me :( *cries* lol.. wanna battle? ;) haha jk jk.. but yeah much props hommie..
7/10
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yea i was mos def feeling this...as you know im not a real topical cat....
but this had real nice vocab in it....a great story line also...imagery was great in some part....not as great in others...but still good all the way through....shit was pretty ill man
i see your workin on using real multies lol....nah but for real...this was a good peice man....i was mos def feelin it
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yea I like the story son...I think u forced the vocab in spots but the flow was good...nice multies some u didn't need but nice anyways...the story developed nicely...the way u ended it coulda been better...structure was tight...reall nice son...you def elevating alot son....keep it up......1
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...very nice peice Para...
i've always liked your style..
let's see...Structure seemed to be onpoint all throught out the peice..
hmmm...Vocab was good throughout whole peice..
Great imagery, and flow was very nice..
i was feelin the whole peice..but i am not going to say your best..i've seen u do better..but you did have perfect structure throughout the whole peice...
props, CC AKA JK
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Really good piece...
Flow and rhyme scheme were good and the structure was perfect. But what I noticed the most was the creativity and the imagery. Can tell you put a lot of effort into this and it came out great...keep droppin'
Return favour please...link in sig
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That was very creative u had a good flow it had nice emotion u have alot of potential keep it up youll be going places for real :)
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Cool nice structured piece right here.
I liked the flow and the concept was
ok. Your vocabulary was pretty good
but you can elevate on better word
usage. I think I seen you struggle a
little with the vocabulary choice I know
you wanted your piece to flow, so it
can be hard to choose the right vocabulary and
have it flow....Anyways overall pretty decent.
The story line was constructed pretty good.
Stay droppin...
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thanks a lot i appreciate the feedback,
uppin for some more..i cant wait to be in hof:)
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damn that shit was ill....it sorta mixed tha story at the end cuz it was saying u were smoking and then u were moving and smoking with ur ad or sumthing..but this piece is one of the great ones man great job..deserves a nomination lol..ur flow was great 'cept u had a few questionable rhymes here and there but still good, I liked ur structure too...great piece...10/10..check mine out and leave feed man
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=212049
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thanks a lot for the feedback
uppin for a 2nd page here,
please more feedback i'll rtf when i get back on tuesday
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very dope...i enjoyed tha imagery...your whole verse sttod out to me pretty much...i could nt really see anything to improve here....everything really seemed to be on point...yur vocab was tight...i liked tha vocab you chose a lot matter of fact....your wordplay and structure was tight...all in all this piece was mad ill.....keep droppin tha hottness.~1~
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that was dope homie, all i can say is im impressed i wana hear it over a track, good stuff man
