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nice man I liked it but it was a lil short for a love topical lol...dont let her read it haha, but yeah I liked ur vocab and how it flowed since it was short but I would like an edited longer version if u dont mind lol...but pretty good man keep writing.. 6/10 a lil too short dude
Here to return the favor...
Others have probably already said this but I got this feeling you left me waiting for something, I was missing indepth information, details about how this situation grew and such you know. Other than that, everything was pretty solid. Flow was off here and there but overall it was good. Vocab was on point, you had a fine balance between basic and complex. Emotion was pure and serene where as the imagery brought something powerful.
Solid piece!