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Originally Posted by Vaskez
I AGREE, IT WAS A PRETTY DECENT battle, but wasnt feeln it on certain things.....
1st verse i think was decent had good lines, ok structure, could work on line set up some.... was funny for the most part... had some fillers, and sayn youre infinite, i feel is a self glory line, so you gets no points for that, this is a battle homie, go more towards the personals, instaed of trying to be completely witty with words.............................
2nd verse..
was also good..... feeling the lines could use work on it...... had some ok points in personals, but again, this was also another one of those funny battles..... alittle on the wordy part, get to the point of throwing punchlines, you had decent vocab, and pers...polish up alittle on adding all them different quotations...but its iight,......good shit.
my vote/-------------------------Doc Adonis...
just had that extra umphh..!! in his verse...
VOTE ON MY OPEN BATTLE... DROP LINKS WILL RETURN THE FAVOR.
overall
3-0..uppin...
Not that great a battle
i felt doc's verse hit harder, better disses
Bit more cleverness than word...so
V/ Doc adonis
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=191858
Hit this and i'll poll
you polls close..therfor i cant poll..so just poll on here an ill get your next battle..
aight ima break it down make sure ya rtf fairly and peep my battle against cruel wisdom..
word_pusher:
ya dome'll hit the floor before they mention you herb
only ring that you be getting into...ends with a -worm
- blah average opener
you're a flamer..but that line in ya sig is senseless
what you meant was gay emcees...and with four inches
- haha had me laughin
elevate? you learning my methods is just hopeless
too sick..and Doc'll never get the diagnosis
- weak
ya fans are all men...aint a honey on the jock
so i'll storm through and wipe out any dummy on the 'dock'
- another weak line
this 'Don ain't real..even wacker niggas see through
only hits ya fam put out was smack when they conceived you
- weak filler
ya not fresh..my nursery school played yo rhymes
are you on medicare? stop coming with the same 'old lines'
- wack punch
you must be dumb..prolly failed at pegs when they birthed you
it's simple logic..squares don't belong in winner's circles
- ok line
i'm infinite..my record'll get there and fast
while yours'll stay stuck at a steady 'zero dash' (0-..)
- played as fuck closer, overall this verse was ok but it could've been alot better, you didnt have hardly any punches or personals.. 4/10
Doc Adonis:
this dicks-bright his lips-tight he could never spit-nice
cause really.. he couldnt rip decent TRACKS in a chick-fight...
- blah ok opener
dont fit-right with A-Don..an a-bomb cant even stomp-this....
and Dont Respawn..cuz ya first mistake was calling out Adonis....
- nice line
i dawn-sick...physically kid step-again... ima be quick to rock-his-chin..
i coulda no showed this..............an easily coped-the-win..
- ok rhymin not really a punch
you droped-thin you lockin the doc-in an ya knees will-swell....
ya beat is felt? you dodgin...you'll be the first to get D's "L"
- nice
they weak fail..i lower you -tracks- an defeat this battle"cat" he's tryin???
im the blower of your -stats- this fags wack... i beat more "pussys" then male-felines...
- played as fuck
one nine? rhymes bad..ya lines-passed...just call me his part-time dad...
"cuz in my day"..ive never seen a "pro"-glad.. to get beat so-bad...
- didnt really get this
ya prevailing-deep? naa ya sellings-weak an ya failing-ya-geek...
closest to "word pushing" he get is in his schools spelling-b....
- average
your barely-seen..its obsured how your not even heard....
BUT the only "STRAIGHT" *LINE* you posses is between pusher and word....
- ok closer, overall this was just an average battle you had a few punches but they could've hit harder, but you did enough to win this battle...6/10
vote = doc adonis
dont forget to peep my battle against cruel wisdom, thanks.
4-0....
yo check out my battle against cruel wisdom man
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...53#post2394653
thanks
calling that line filler means you didn't get it..pfft.Quote:
this 'Don ain't real..even wacker niggas see through
only hits ya fam put out was smack when they conceived you
- weak filler
Don't miss this? Don't put wack shit like that in the title
Word - Some of your shit didn't make sense. The gay 2nd bar didn't make any sense. 1st bar was questionable. After that though, damn, not bad man. About every bar you spit after that was a punch and some of them were even solid as I really liked the dummy on the doc line. Could have been worded better some lines, but overall decent verse.
Doc - Avoid the self-glory man, don't talk about it being a mistake that you were called out. I felt most of your shit was statements and wasn't really hitting. The only line I liked was about word pusher. The rest of your shit had a really nice flow, keep that, but work on punches.
Honestly I think word's punches were much better than Doc's. Doc no offense but if you win dont' take much from it cause little kids who know nothing about rap are voting on this.
Vote - Word
the 2nd bar was in reference to the sig he had when i wrote that..he changed it like i mentioned earlier in the thread from:
*steady rippin emcees since 0'4"*
instead of 04'. hence the crack. it's cool though i knew that shit would miss once i saw he changed it.
uppin.
uppinnnnnnnnnnn
upppin....
iight dis was a o.k battle....i did notice that he changed his sig....but it didn't matter Doc came harder he had betta punches and wordplay.....good battle.......v/doc....will poll after you vote on battle in sig........holla ~1~