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it was alright good flow but could have used better vocab keep elevatin dawg
what ever happen to Renegauge in his battle...he was kid of hot...he did get shit on..by those fucked up viewers..i like his last flow....peace out
that was nice, my honest opinion is that you can do better.
..Nice drop
As i read through your piece, i notice that you are an over average writer..
..You know how to structure a piece, you know where and when to fill a sentence in with a good rhyme
You have a good vocab, wich is a must, to be honest, with Open Mics..
..The one thing that dissapointed me really was the fact that your topic didn't catch me and grip me
What you were writting about was kinda lame..
..With your O.M writing skill, and some improvment with your topics, i tip that you will be `one fuck` of a OM writer on and off RB!
All in all..
..Very impresed, mayne! :thumbup:
I really liked it. It's alot like the shit I do, I like the deep stuff, Kweli, Common are my favorite artist and this was very well done...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...19#post2381719
Well Crazy Carl (If that is your real name) I'm not really feeling your rhymes you get where i am going, Maybe if you just CHILL and take some lessons from the man 2 pack or biggie mall then you could be as good as one of those two are now! Just read it over and over again until u can see new rhymes dogg
4.8/10
^Ok, I'll ask "2 Pack or Biggie" for some pointers.
Bump.
This was a nice piece...Ive seen better from you tho...I liked ur imagery, vocab could be more complex, but it was ok.....I think your pieces could be doper if you work on a better rhyme scheme...But overall this was nice, If you could please drop feedback on my latest OM...The Excrushiating Journey, Links in my sig ;)
eem, i was feeling this peice, however it was kinda confusing, possibly because i am not very topically inclined, but still nice use of vocab and it flowed extremely well, keep it up, and maybe make it slightly longer so more emphasis can be used on the topic.
thx for the suggestions homie
complexity is always good
if you understand this we prob have a similar style