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Wow, wasn't expecting this to be a great piece, but I was wrong. This was a very nice peice, your flow was constant, structure was decent, really nice vocab, there were alot of multi's as well. Pretty coo topic to write about, all in all this was a very strong piece .
Stay up .
thx for the feeds guys...
I've been meaning to get back to this, sorry for taking so long.
This is an old concept, one that everyone should at least touch on, from time to time. I liked the Picasso twist on it though, I have been fortunate enough to have seen some of Picasso's works with my own eyes, and he was a wonderful painter. I think if you'd of gone deeper into the whole cubism idea you could've gone much further with this, it's got that potential.
Certain parts weren't worded as good as they could've been, like 'I twiddle with words.' I am sure you could've thought of a better way to say this. Also you didn't digress enough. What I mean by this, you could've gone off at a tangent somewhat with this topic. It's the sort of topic that allows this kind of experimentation, I thought it was one dimensional in that aspect. But still, the overall quality of your writing was fairly good.
Keep dropping here.
thx Jekyll...i didn't go deeper because i wrote it quite a hurry.and i was mostly focusing on experimenting on rhymescheme and flow,because my older pieces lacked quality in those issues.but thx again for the tips man...they are apreciated.