Soft Melody

bump...drop a link.

its aight could be better keep workin on it ok work on flow and a little on vocab it was kinda deep but good job neways overall verse rate- 6.5/10

this piece was good...good details n emotion....imagery too, very nice.....the structure and rhyme scheme were put together nicely....tho it was short i could catch the meaning n message u were gettin at....vocab was nice also ... thanks for the feed on my drop i will keep those things in mind....good drop......

pretty good piece.....6/10....imagery nice...but forced in parts....think the vocab wasn't complex enough so up that......and work on your flow kinda lost it in the middle

short peice you could use more multis both ways through out the verse stucture was good and the flow wasnt that bad. vocab was decent, imagery was good and the emotion sometimes seemed forced. 1

uppin

Pretty good stuff, it kinda just ends...which i didnt like, but the concept was cool, and the description. You should add to it though, and make the ending more of an ending, instead of a drop off. also, try and use transition rhymes, flow will improve.

i like this peice...thought that it read slightly choppy though...but that relates to the structure...although i think that this gives the peice a bit of character...the structure doesn't always have to be perfect for the piece to work well...it can give it that little be of individualism...as I regard clips of memory as just segments...thought that this was a good line as most people will be able to relate to it...it conjures up good imagery as does a lot of the rest of the peice...keep on at it...

Feedback'd be appreciated

Dream