Music's Artists-A Pancakez collab.

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I have the usual amount of knowlege about Bob Marley, know of Slug but I've not heard any of his music and I have honestly have no idea who Tego Calderon is, bit Im gonna try to do my best with this...

- Bounce Bob Marley....
Obviously, the first thing that strikes me is the whole Jamaican theme running throughout the verse. The colour scheme is executed perfectly and a really clever idea that adds a whole lot to the piece, props to either bounce or the guy who posted it on that. Now the piece itself was a very good read, you express excellently and I liked the way that you incorperated part of Bob's works into your piece, ie One Love and I've only ever heard the word Trenchtownin his songs, so I think you did really well with that. Your vocab is very strong, you have lines that I could never dream od writing, and especially as this would be such a tough topic to write about, I'll be taking notes lol....
Incite a movement with a groove meant to soothe men
Proven delusions abuse men, when War’s the only solution
....There my personal favourite lines, great work man.

- Twixn.... Slug....
Im not too familiar with the work of Slug, but I really liked your piece, maybe more than the other 3. Your vocab was excellent and you pursued the topic very well. In the times you came more simple with your vocab, its simplicity was overshadowed by the overall strength and meaning of the words, you're my favourite type of poet, one that I can read and it doesn't confuse yet its more complex than others. You're opener was a really nice bar, and your last few lines killed it very well. Overall, this was really nice and the only thing I couldn't really comment on was the fact it was written about Slug....

Sharp. Tego Calderon....
Ok, I have no idea who this guy is and I cant speak Spanish but Ima do my best... First off, I havent noticed Sharp aroind the site before, does that add to my noob status? Anyways, this piece to me wasn't the strongest out of the 3, but its by no means weak as it has plus points the others didnt have. I think the way you rhymes both languages fitted this piece perfectly, Spanish is a beautiful language and I think it made this verse stand out that much more, I can't really comment on what you were saying but I loved the whole concept of the verse......
Self hate laced lyrics fused with latin drums and beats.
A heavy bass to make sure you car thumps on streets
.... Thats a really nice line, excellently put, great work.

Overall, this was a great idea put to a really impressive collab. I think all three had there strong points, and each had good solid vocab and a fine structure. I liked the way the whole piece was set out too, good work to whoever did that.

I really like the musical artists concept to this piece, one Id like to tackle myself in the future.....

Great work :thumbup:

this was nice, and i was doing it!! why didnt you pmed me lol . .or w.e its cool i guess..

this was a nice read :)

Thanks to everyone for leaving replies. I really appreciate the feedback. I know most people don't know tego, lol. He's a reggeaton artist, pretty new but I think he's dope. By the way, I'm sharp, Aka Paroxysm, Aka Brian Amaya, Aka that sexy motherfucker that you love. Damn issue, you really left alot of feed, that's so damn appreciated. Everyone else, love ya' little bastards.

*hands out pancakes to everyone*

Thanks eddy, we waited for three weeks for everyone to get their verses done, I wish you would've posted your piece sooner.

I would've liked to have done a verse for this, it could've been Pancakez feat. Jekyll.

Sharp, we never did that collab we spoke about a while ago on AIM. I'll PM you a verse later this week, and see what you come up with. Okay?

That would be dope as fuck. I always wanted to do a collab with you man.

Keep your eye's out for Issue, I can tell you now, he will be one of the elite on RB if he keeps his head straight, and absorbs the advice he is given. Good looks on that feed man, and yeah the color scheme is my own, I'm known for off the wall shit like that. I remember that verse I dropped in SS against kerr had some what of a color scheme to it.

Thanks to all for the feed, and Eddy, damn wish we could have had your portion, but there is always next time. Jek, you know we are due for some kind of collab, I just need to find the time, I really liked this one, from our favorite artist perspective, you know I had to get in on that.

Thanks to all the Pancakez for allowing me write with them, you do know this is my first ever collab right?

Here's an idea, next one lets do it throught the eye's of our favorites artists' children, I will have some serious fire for that!!!

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:( i thought this was audio...anyways...nice

good to see this more vets returning to OM...and Bounce,good thing you did with the new rules.OM was infested with to many lame "artists" and disses...
ok now for your collab...

Bounce
Good idea to use the jamaican colors,and i could see some Bob Marley thoughts there...you wrote well from his perspective.i liked everything about your verse:the flow,the rhymescheme,the vocabulary,and especialy your ideas,the thoughts...i really like your style man.

Twixn
you wrote well from Slug's perspective.but for some reason i couldn't relate to him the same way i did with Bob Marley in Bounce's verse.but don't get me wrong you did a good job...you're ideas and thoughts were also good.the flow and vocabulary was all on point...

Sharp

i don't know that much spanish,but i could understand most of the things you've said...i liked that you blended two languages in your verse,especially that one was a latino language.i don't know...there's something about latin languages...they are more musical,they sound the best when it comes to singing.what i didn't like about your verse is that i didn't feel it like Twixn's and Bounce's verses.other than that nothing to complain.good job.

Overall a great collab guys...no flaws really stood up...all of you had mature thoughts and ideas,and this to me is very important...Keep it up!

Thanks for taking the time man, it's appreciated...

Bounce - Always a pleasure to read your stuff, and as said before the Jamaican colors were a great addition and really upped the overall look of it.. i liked the outline of the whole thing, nice to see you draw inspiration from such a great man... That's always good when you can find something or someone that you are really passionate about, and write to it.. it came out beautiful and i am looking forward to seeing more from you.. flow, structure, writers voice.. all strike the bullseye of the target.

Twixn - i really liked yours too, you have improved much from when you first joined TNL way back when you first registered, that is awesome. I thought everything from yours was really on point also. I'm sure all of the people would be proud, i really liked the simplicity at times in your verse, simplicity is key at times and can really up the read, so you did a really good job with that and it made for a smooth gliding read.. good job.

Sharp - and just like issue, i dont really know who the guy that you did is Sharp, so i googled him and found a sample of one of his tracks and he is really good, nice to see you did him.. i thought the multi-language was a really nice addition to it, spanish is a beautiful language when used correctly and you did just that, you nailed this verse and i really enjoyed reading this also. very good job.

I thought mainly this was a very good collab that i am happy i read and took my by storm, you all exceeded my expectations, so good job to all of you and hail to the cakes.

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Again, thanks for the feed gentleman, we really do appreciate any and all feedback.

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