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Originally Posted by Deviate
Hmm, well i thought my homebra deviate had the better verse, then Na-Ledge and then Issue...
Issue, i sorry brotha, but i didnt like your structure at all, your lines were hella stretched so work on that because that was your major set-back foolio, but other than that, decent.
Na~Ledge, yours was second best i believe, so good job, the structure was a tad better than Issue's... i thought you had a better take at the topic also, plus you just had a better development of your story line.. so good job with that.
Deviate..holmes!, i thought that you came the best here and i really liked that scribbling under the light line, that was really good, i love your Writer's Voice the most, i can almost envision you speaking what you say.. that is awesome, and the inners and multi's were pretty good..
Overall good job by all of you, i liked the way the verses all tied together.. i am impressed and happy that i read this..
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I suppose I didn't come great on this, but Id prefer if you read past my structure and also my other pieces before you told me to elevate.
Thanks for the feed.
PM me a link and i would be glad to do so.
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