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wow dude thats funny cuz jus yesterday my gf dumped me and i put sum o that shit 2getha in like 5 mins and gave it 2 her and she came bak... that shit is powerful man and after that peice i think u almost mastered it... i like that it flowed good, the rhymes was strang, u neva went off subject, good vocab all in all very tight nigga very tight... by the way those last 2 lines was dope man
yo thanks for the feed back guys much appreciated...but needin more
com'n people tlk about sleepin.............
its an exellent piece. it had a nice flow, a good subject, and dont listen to kaus he couldnt find real talent even if it bit him in the ass
thankz shell...much appreciated..
y0 if u waz expressing urself u diffently made it hott
your welcome
cheerz...i like where your from starz...:thumbup:
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ye that shit was hot...yo hit me back on that favour
ok...first i wanna say lucky for you cuz it was short,cuz if it would've been longer i wouldn't have read it.i could anticipate your next rhyme,what you were going to say basically...it was all so basic:rhymescheme,vocabulary,no deep emotions that i could feel...elevate man on rhymescheme,vocabulary,wordplay etc
yo im likin it, tha emotion was there tha deliver was there...overall it was a great piece, my only suggestion mayb is b a lil more complex..u used alot of kiddy rhymes an i think if u used a lil more complexity than i think it would stand out betta..done pz no hate
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Yo Street ya talent blew me away i loved everything about it. It was very interesting.
ya what he said man very interesting.