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Uppin.

Can i please have a few more replies to this piece i think its getting mad slept on.

Uppin again.

This was a good piece... A lot of emotion which always makes pieces stand out from the others. Writing and showing emotion is almost like describing it to the reader, makes them a lot more involved and interested. I think you did that here... You wrote with good vocabulary and metaphor also, which both add to the overall feeling of the piece. I liked the topic, it was quite interesting. The question format attracts someone because they automatically try to answer it and will read the whole thing to find their answer...

You used good methods, as I described above with a good writing style. However, it could've possibly been a little longer and maybe structured a little better but otherwise, very nice piece.

Thanks for the feedback on "Tears of the World"

Peace