Link this to the WP forum.
I'll read it when I have more time.
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Link this to the WP forum.
I'll read it when I have more time.
Both came straight, the multis on sylentz switch after a while which got my attention on the way he thinks... Not bad at all, but not great.
The flow was good, the topic unique. The passability was purposed and the preperations were good...
Nothing I can say bad about it, except the name... Suicidal Thoughts :confused:
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?p=2201616
^ getchatit.
LoLQuote:
Originally Posted by Baron Mynd
up..
Damn, I'm glad I'm not young and depressed anymore!
It's really hard for me to critique these pieces because I tend to view them as whiny.
But, I guess I've been there, done that...and hated it.
So, I chose instead, to fuck being lonely and started getting high, skipping school, and became an all around thievin, heathen, drug dealin, satan believin, schemin, muggin, thuggin, halucinatin, referred adjudicatin fool.
Worked for me.
Good pieces...Sylentz flow was there, though I didn't care for the change in it.
A...A
A...A
For the first 8-10 lines...
Then it switched up for some reason. I dunno.
I also wouldn't use the "wife, life, knife" triple threat..only thing you didn't add was "strife", which I see so many cats doing, yet no one uses that fucking word in real life. Stay off the common shit...be better than that.
Eddy, much more complex, much better vocab, you complex motherfucker, you.
Just felt your's came a bit more haunting...even more hopeless than ya homie's up there. Good shit.
Now, go smoke a fuckin joint, vandalize something, pick a fight and beat someone's ass, then get busted and chill in jail for a coupla days.
Your life will instantly be more exciting!
Peace
im getting a kid, exciting enough? lol this was just for killing the time, the topic.. i kinda refused too write to it though cause i did this before .. like you said been there done that .. but its good too write with new kids, up there level ya heard, .. im still in search of a dope topic so if you have an idea holla at me btk :thumbup:Quote:
Originally Posted by Born To Kill
We made Hall of Fame with our last one...
I dunno, lemme think.
thats pretty good stuff yo.. iwell written....i
m too depressed to give a proper response
ima go top ma'self now
ofcourse, with a nice topic` half assed writing we will get into HOF but i dont care though i made up the concept with maven so its not really something wow for me .. lol lets come whole assed .. lmao and get it into legends i need my 4th piece in there ..hollaQuote:
Originally Posted by Born To Kill
up bitch
christ.