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Not bad guys. One or two things: try to incorporate more heavyweight imagery, and work on your wording and diction some. Also, try to keep a count on the amount of syllables you use, or the rhythm gets broken. But overall this is a decent read, better than a lot of pieces in OM. Keep elevating guys.
damn....
good story... and very well put together
only suggestion, is work on your multis, and your lines were kinda stretched
but the content was fuckin dope.... great shit
9/10
eh.......uppin
ill drop.liked the concept,someone talkin to his illusions,and olso liked the overall ideas in it.good structure and flow(multis helped a lot),and olso good vocab.the colab was nice,you blended well togheter the two drops givin much details,paintin' the overall imagery well.a nice read.keep droppin!
if ya have time,please return the feed :K9&Metallica in my sig.
word.
Up. For some fucking random reason.
Damn I'm the only that drops real feed, Sinamen you are one the wackest fucks I know, You've been in over 80 battles at rb. And you spit like this??? smh. Have you not tried to elevate????, I mean c'mon now no mulits no flow no lyricsms?? Bad strucutre, I mean your lines are as long as mine but you dont even throw mulits WTf. This peace or any of you two are not even considered good in my book. I'm ashamed in 93% of rb. Besides the story line everything else sucked. See how both of you wote your verse? Now try doing that with multis better iamgery better flow and rhyme scheme and better strucutre. I bet you my life neither one of you could. Without mastering all the arts in om how can you be considered good?? You cant. Keep dropping tho, Maybe one day you'll elevate. And become a vet.
This piece was ill...good concept...clever story...caught me by suprise when i read it...you both fit eachothers schemes real well...so the collab seemed natural...ill shit...great story tellling...if you get a chance hit my latest...respect...-E-
The Return (Po'Ethics)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...25#post2293825
Alpha got banned before 3 weeks ago?
whoa.
he did?
how did he post then