Anticipation

shit was hot and it had a whole lot of vocabulary dats good
keep this shit up dude .....one

ay, it had a good flow man but work on your creativity, your using simple words that just rhyme. bring some thought into it, look for any places you can be creative to fill in the gap. nice little piece, keep working...1

shit was nice...losta multies...stay up...~1~

"when the experience is over, I feel an emotional release
my anticipation decrease gives me a certain inner piece
that can only be achieved through my own goal completion
having not believed in yourself leads to self-control depletion"

shit was nice

i thought this was a nice drop ..... good rhyme scheme n nice wordplay.... vocabulary was good too... nice overall story kept me wantin to continue ... ~one~

uppin

uppin for feedback, I'll hit up your pieces

like that bro, u got some vocab w/ dem rhymes, i like how u did that lil chorus, meanin behind everything

This was pretty good, I saw the emotion in it... Like a trully felt feeling on what you though about the subject. Not to mention to structure was displayed nice, the bigger you got: you kept with it even better. So this was a nice read, the rhymes were nice sounding too. Not perfect, but they were better than most's vocabulary. Nice work.

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^ thanks.

When I read the forst verse I though it was about a persons first sexual experience. But as I read further I think your were talking on a much broader scale. I think It flowed together very well and you were very detailed in ur description although I do think u could have upped ur vocab a little for this piece. But overall it was syill a nice drop. Keep doin ur thing.


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uppin, ya horny mutha fuckas, lol, its not about sex

yea i like this, good flow, real good vocab. imagery on point......1

sik use of word play, to the point, confusing yet so damn satisfying. but thats the beautful thing with poetry, it causes you to read more than what your words are saying. nice shit man very nice.

This was good... Good flow throughout. But I'm not sure I really got into this... I don't know why. This is clearly just me because everyone else seems to have really felt it and connected with it. That, however, by no means takes away from it. I think it could've perhaps been expressed a little better or differently but that's purely my opinion. It was definately a nice piece and it showed you could write well but maybe adding a little more complexity would help. The structure was good also.

If you could check out "Trinity..." in my sig I'd appreciate it.

Peace

Shit double post... Sorry

yea i was really feelin that tha first few barz grabbed me in and you aint weaken in it i aint really think you had to add many other multis n shyt but it still was hot ~1~