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OMG WTF... Center Light or w/e the fuck get a fucking clue u newbie fuck tard hippie..... how the fuck is that a DICK RYDE.......... i dont even know ur fucking punk ass, and celest WTF u know i dont d'r fuck yall niccaz are fucked
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When I first began, the world was full of happiness and love
People respected me, shown love "praise the one above"
aight open
The world was a happy place to be, Everyone Lived in Peace
People shared amongst each other, Everyone would feast
on track
No shortages of food,there was plenty to go around, to share
People would show love for one another, someone to fall on who cares
nice line
Hate would be their fate, My world was great and peaceful
No hate was shown, no advantage taken of the gullable
aight
People were safe to roam the streets, Not be rushed of their feet
Everyone was classed as one, each person recognised as elite
ok....bit obscure
But in this day and age, the world has changed from all of this
People seem miserable, everyone is no longer in a state of bliss
aight
Poverty is everywhere, Hate is in the air, The world has changed
Human minds have changed, People have been driven to be deranged
good
The wealthy have seperated from the poor, Now everyone is mistreated
The world is not what i wanted it to be, I almost feel defeated
good smooth switch
No longer do people feel at one with each other, but feel hated
The world is no longer ran by me, but by other people, Its Dictated
nice furthering
The world at the moment is not what i thought it would be, Its bad
I no longer feel i want to be named the creator of this, It makes me sad
ending of line 2 was weak
In the future I hope for all of this evilness to be wiped out
No doubt no one wants this, My wish is for success devout
hmmm...not same standard
A perfect world containg no violence nor iBullying or Hate
There would be no fate, The world would be everlasting, No debate
good recovery
No poverty or inequality would be good, The world be so much better
Instead of hate we`d show love, blackmail would be a love letter
ahaha.....like this line
A better place to live, people would feel safe on the streets
Women would be safe, Gangs would be around in fleats
aight
In the future of this world, No violence, no poverty and no lies
But this will never happen, BECAUSE ITS ONLY IN MY EYES
nice close
sylentz....
nice verse dawg...really feeling it...some slight errors but all in all great piece
in a place vailed to the human eye.. where i watch and wonder
whether im seen as the God of grace.. or the God of thunder
good open
my sons and daughters you are not forsakened.. this i promise
these lips are honest.. my eye's in the sky as distant comets
forsakened is not a word....line was weak...
from the dawn of time cursed.. to see my creations de-create
being a lost piece to this chessgame.. is not an easy wait
1st line tight....2nd let it down
til judgement day is upon us.. i know that it seems selfish
but to have will is to be independant.. & so im left helpless
probably best line of the piece
each childs born pure.. this i give but im just the sponsor
it tears me up.. to see innocent souls turned to monsters
aight line
and i cry for those of whom.. the quality of living is bad
to see daughters raped & sons stabbed.. not the vision i had
good thought..wording off
the peaceful entity of life.. as much as i'd like to erase her
can still be felt.. alone in the woods through mothernature
aight
i stay with you through it all.. i feel everything that you do
a small piece of me, you see.. i live my own life through you
good
existance molded of dirt & sand.. maybe was the worst plan
dont forget i was birthed as man.. and felt it firsthand
aight
the sorrow in my heart.. for the pain & suffering of mankind
i never planned to disease.. abandon.. or leave a man blind
weak....why spoil it ?
lives are lost in vein everyday.. i fear evils growing number
i supplied the world with food.. why do people go in hunger?
nice
and to think about, all the time i put in.. isnt it great?
it took seven days to build.. milleniums to fix the mistake
ending of first line killed the concept...which was actually dope
washing away the sin of man.. forgiving all endless & honest
heavens gates'l flood.. as we again replentish the process
aight
the world wasnt born of bad blood.. it developed over time
just a few kinks in the chain.. can have people going blind
again ending of 2nd line made concept sound corny
and altho i understand ur barraged with evil since youre born
its still ultimately up to you.. if u wanna wear wings or horns
nice close
verdict : i really wanted to go for centre sight........some of his concepts were dope, really great.....but he killed too many of his lines off with silly concepts, not taking the time to finish them properly....therefore i go with sylentz he had some dope lines, staying on track throughout...the quality was consistant
my vote : sylentz
i really dont see where i lost this.. but whatever yall say lol
aight heres how i see it...
sylentz...you had a pretty good verse thou the dialouge was chessy. you expressed some shit any one would have to agree with and stayed on topic the whole time thats important i was kinda disappointed though cuz you didnt get to complex or have wordplay and your vocab wasnt all that great either. your verse flowed good thou and thats always good. your ending was pretty good to.
Center Sight...you had a pretty ill verse man should be a song or somethin the ending to dat shit was killer mad nice flow but you didnt get complex wit your shit or use wordplay either. smooth consistent and on topic
vote/ Center Sight...why? i feel he came with the overall better verse his shit was nice
hit this up with a vote...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176389
funny you people vote on a topical battle,but break down every couple of bars and grade it as a battle
lmao i know isnt it hilarious..
voting for sylentz is cool, but it makes me laugh to see the breakdowns. sylentz was more complex? not at all. center was more complex. A couple people said differently and don't know what they are talking about. Take this for example:
The world at the moment is not what i thought it would be, Its bad
I no longer feel i want to be named the creator of this, It makes me sad
the emotion.. where was it ? "its bad"? "it maes me sad"? Should've used more descriptive language, and used examples to back up your point. This was very basic, not complex. That doesn't mean sylentz verse sucked.. it didn't. Sy came decent. Center was on a different level. Sy's concept, to me, was original. So was center's. I've never seen the 'from the eyes of God' topic before. This battle was interesting because of that. But center's writing was better.
and i cry for those of whom.. the quality of living is bad
to see daughters raped & sons stabbed.. not the vision i had
existance molded of dirt & sand.. maybe was the worst plan
dont forget i was birthed as man.. and felt it firsthand
the sorrow in my heart.. for the pain & suffering of mankind
i never planned to disease.. abandon.. or leave a man blind
lives are lost in vein everyday.. i fear evils growing number
i supplied the world with food.. why do people go in hunger?
and to think about, all the time i put in.. isnt it great?
it took seven days to build.. milleniums to fix the mistake
my favorite part from center
In the future I hope for all of this evilness to be wiped out
No doubt no one wants this, My wish is for success devout
A perfect world containg no violence nor iBullying or Hate
There would be no fate, The world would be everlasting, No debate
No poverty or inequality would be good, The world be so much better
Instead of hate we`d show love, blackmail would be a love letter
favorite from sy
wow i dunno what this site is smokin on latley but silentz was real simplistic u need an example?
The world at the moment is not what i thought it would be, Its bad
I no longer feel i want to be named the creator of this, It makes me sad
^what if u people encourage these kids tell em they are elite and that this is what poetry is i seriously want to cry . Not only was sylentz simplistic he lacked alot of emotion no intresting rhyme scheme at all really a bad peice that I'm pretty sure I could free key better then WHY on earth are people voting for that... with that said..
before I'm called a d/r ing hater and shit u can review center sight and my owns past its not a happy one ... in fact I hate the kid but he did come better in this battle shall we take an example?
from the dawn of time cursed.. to see my creations de-create
being a lost piece to this chessgame.. is not an easy wait
til judgement day is upon us.. i know that it seems selfish
but to have will is to be independant.. & so im left helpless
each childs born pure.. this i give but im just the sponsor
it tears me up.. to see innocent souls turned to monsters
and i cry for those of whom.. the quality of living is bad
to see daughters raped & sons stabbed.. not the vision i had
^ wow so much better the emotion and thought put into that much more heartfelt It already looks like sylentz is going to win but ... NO NO NO NO NO and no hate to anyone just write more complex next time sylentz on this i would NOT consider u elite pz.
vote center
sylentz-nice verse..u stayed on topic...gave good imagery on what was happening...ur flow was good...also vocab was better..good job stayin on topic...good verse...
CS-Ur verse was also nice...but i didnt rly get a mental pic in urs...u didnt provide good imagery...nice job with vocab an flow...overall good verse..
V/Sylentz...i think he gave better imagery on his verse an i also like the flow of his verse better..