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This piece took a nice perspective on the whole heaven hell bit and was able to squeeze a good drop of reasonable views into a dope flow, the metaphors were relevant in imagery and the overall idea of this piece was original for the most part, you did a good job ending it too,
So overall a well done drop, keep up the good work
thx again for the feedback..
uppin
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Really impressed with this one. Your imagery was almost flawless and your use of vocab made the pictures almost jump off the page. The only suggeston that I might offer would be to work on your structure. Some of the lines seemed kinda stretched and that will throw off the momentum of ur piece. Other than that nice drop. Seemed to come from within and that always a good thing. Uppin ur next post.
uppin'..
ewww yur cookin up some vivid details right therrrr... but this was amazing my friend!
loved the half-poetic half-open mic feel to it, gotta nothin but love for this piece right hurrrrr
last time uppin'..
This was decent shit. Rhymescheme could be a little stronger, but desides that, it was ok. Keep writing.