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yea bro i though ti was pretty good............the structure wasn't the best, kinda messed me up with the rhymes........but all together it was a good little verse.......keep spittin.........
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i dont have a very good structure but thats tight, ~1~
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Your signature is fucking obnoxious. Take out that X-Men bullshit, what the fuck.
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who tha fuck are you ? fuck off take something off your own goddamn sig.~1~
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My signature isn't big, idiot.
It's alright. If you won't take some shit out to make it smaller I'll just have a S Mod or Admin do it.
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Leave his sig alone lol....
but he should minimize it...
as for your piece I only read the
first couple of bars...and just looked
at your structure...do not use this // <
you need to be very upset at yourself
when you do that. don't seperate your
bars like that either example:
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^ That's annoying...
work on deeper meaning and imagery
and vocabulary but don't over due it.
etc.
peace.
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thanks for tha POSITIVE AND CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM.
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this is very nice i enjoyed it.. goodshit man keep it up..
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one last time.need critique.~1~
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ha ha seems like u got sum hata's... ignore that shit
i fuckin feelin this piece yo.. i think the flow was hot and well written
content ewas interesting and made it a good read
u broke it down well so even stupid people can check the flow out
format style is kinda like an agressive battle style and on point
i'd like to see sum more like this up in here
pz 1
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thanks for tha replies.~1~
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your sig is fucking with the forums and slowing peoples browsing down....change it or i will.
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