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damn i was really enjoying this post man,..deep felt, real poetic quality to it,
one of my fav 4 bars\
last line was killin it. portrays very ellaborate picture within a simple structureQuote:
Deadly shrapnel within the tissues of kin
Families are torn by the impurities of skin
Conflict’s confined deep in a convicts mind
Sentenced to death just one breath at a time
great piece up
it was str8...long piece but as long as u meant it with heart thats all that matters really....keep it up....BRUSH HATERS OF U
I guess this was an ok drop, Really wasnt feelin it that much. Could have been alot better rhyme wise an vocab. Mulitis too. Creativity was there thought too, But thats about it. Overall I guess it was a solid drop nothing special keep elevating.
Lol at pieces like this getting slept on, wake up you wack fucks ..
This wasnt bad, one of the better reads ive come across this week actually. It'd probably be more suited to the poetry forum from the way it came off to me .. The flow worked fine, the imagery in there helped it along and im not greatly poetic, but i thought you pulled off the metaphor pretty good here. I wont reiterate what all the rest have said already, but all in all this was a good read.
Props.