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Instead of you asses being so critical of the SS guidelines, which I admit, are pretty lame, why not analyze this piece n' critique it well ? Dumbfucks, bitching never gets you anywhere.
I understand you have line limit or w/e, I don't really know.. but seeing as how you probly did, you could've done ALOT better. I know it's hard working w/ restrictions, but those restrictions should bring out your best. If you have a line limit, put all you can into the lines you can do. You could've protrayed emotion alot better, dug deeper into Hitler's mind, used more imagery. There's alot of things that could've made this better. I'm not saying it was bad, but i'm not saying it was that good either. I doubt Hitler would reflect in the way you protrayed him too. Instead of writing it like that, I would've probly written it as him looking back and marvelling @ his destruction of Germany. That would've been alot better, n' also would've allowed you to convey more imagery n' emotion across. Like BTK said, Hitler's reflection would've of been of remorse, but rather of no sincerity towards the carnage he created, n' maybe a little saddened that things ended up the way they did.
This is what you need man, you don't need people to feed you bullshit about how "fucked up" Sacred Scritpures is. Sure, this piece was nice, but it wasn't THAT good.. so yeah, next time you have a limit to how many lines n' what not, think about what I said, n' improve. That's all you can do.. take this critique w/ an open mind n' don't bitch @ me.. Pz. -Check out My Girl 'Til The End appreciate it-
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I dont bitch about replies - couldn't really give a shit about people flooding my thread, at least it stays up without my help!!
As a point, Hitler didn't destruct Germany, If anything, when he came to power he saved Germany from what was at the time a very bleak future. I also don't believe that he would have reflected upon his achievements remorsefully. He was well aware of what he was doing, and his added conviction to his actions, in my opinion, meant he genuinely believed in what he was doing was right.
I appreciate the replies though people, and I admit, yes this verse could have been considerably better than it was, but I wrote it on the train journey back to Uni on sunday. So it was rushed, and then my opponent no-showed. Meh...
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nice ,different,vocab good.a little short.versitile complex..symetrical<---lol just talkin shit..but i loved it a different point of view not of the NORM i like creativity not just some gangsta talk all the time pretty dope boi boi
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just in case anyone was wondering, I'm NOT a white supremicist or a nazi... It was a topic that I was given in SS...
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