Great word choice. You had some nice emotion and the flow was good.
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Great word choice. You had some nice emotion and the flow was good.
uppity up
upping this dopeness for mes
Interesting read here. Usually I never read anything in here but this sort of surprised me. Nice flow to it & the choice of words were rather fitting. Content was nice & it never seemed to drop off at all
Sliding down a razor, slitting wrists on this playground
Conveyed a bloody image of an angel whos dreams were never found
The sky became an ocean swimming with dead corpses
Remorse was their cries as I joined their evil forces
^ The truth.
good shit
Great rhyming on this, not always the most
important thing in poetry but this flowed
smoothly. Great imagry (something i do
consider v.important). Brilliant use of words
to really express what you were feeling and
to paint a perfect picture in my mind. Can't
fault this, everything was near perfect, great
job...4.5/5