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Mantra...decent verse....not your greatest....emotion was ok....
and your imagry was solid...straight forward story...all in all this
was a solid drop
Civilized Gangsta....seriously...I hope you've elevated :shoot:
Or else Ima boot you from PL.....jk...but seriously...read
what Bounce said
Vote=Mantra
This wasnt a particularly good battle.
Mantra: You came better with vocab and story overall, some decent enough imagery, but nothing special. Overall an aiight verse.
Civilized Rebel: Im not to sure exactly what you were going for with your piece, definately room for improvement, try your hand at a few OM's to build up your skill before going topical battle again, the feedback on those is usually quite helpful.
Vote//Mantra
Please hit up the link in my sig :thumbup:
mantra, really feelin ya verse..very nice, and descriptive, very well put together.
c.r, you had a nice verse to, although i still haven't figgered out what all those bold words are for..hmm..but you're structure was a little off...made it difficult to read...mantra..nice structure...hit up the links in the sig honestly yo
v/ mantra.