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this was nice...your lines looked stretched but when i read it ti didn't sound bad at all...your imagery was nice, not powerful, kind of a light image, like a painting doen with the lihtest touch, you can see the whole picture but without intensity....the poem had a very laid back vibe...i could sense a hazy mind, not exactly pained...but you message was clear...you described the struggle well, you used appropriate vocab...that could have been elevated a little more, but that really doesn't take away from the piece at all...this was nice...keep writing...
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i thought i didnt like u at first but u have a real hard flow to u n' ur not afraid to use some metaphors like other emcees
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