why ??? need sum feedback

ty for the feedback y'all
still upping ..........
comon ppl

nice shit man good work, really takes a look how the bush has fucked things up with the iraq shit and why kids join the army, it may not be in detail but it comes across strong, short and sweet, nice drop man props.

ty bruh
still upping for this piece
pz

yo
say whta ya think bout this stuff
honest comments plz
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this was cool. i felt the emotion behind it. some of the rhymes were a little too simple. i don't knokw if you purposly did that or not, but none the less you still got your point across and it was an ok read. Himself is right about your best lines. i liked the way you ended it off also it leaves you thinking. alright drop keep it up.

ty for the feedback bruh
& for the rest who gone b readin this
DROP A FEEDBACK AFTER YA READ SHIT ..... hehe
pz

nice read...flow and vocab was on point. i agree with you on the topic, bush has got to go. showed raw emotion, keep droppin for real

Nice drop, I enjoyed reading this even if it is a played subject. Thought it had a good consistent flow and wasnt long and boring like some others. Stayed allright the whole way through but the rhymes were a bit simplistic. Apart from that it was quite good.

wouldnt wanna sound like a broken record so I cant really give you much.
However I kinda liked your peice it was aiight.
keep postin dawg.
return the favor if you would plz.

kinda simple

ty for the feedback y'all
still uppin on this piece
comon yo
this is a gd 1
pz

Yea I enjoyed reading it fam nice drop. I liked it a lot better than your other one. Keep at it though. I'll holla.

its aight...i mean flow was real choppy but emotion was nice. i was feelin alotta the shit you were talkin bout in this piece

grip your hands together , let us burn sum candles
if we stay together i am sure we can handle
they were affraid to die on the battlefield
our soljaz got used as a human shield

i was feelin that right there. nice drop. stay up

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