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Lol @ Macabre....voting for meh
All I ask is for honest votes as well
I mean not to sway but we need
heads in here that drop Open Mics..
On the real I took this.
and what the hell is unique about your drop..?
you copied off of me, which you have fed before.
So be real with yourself .
Topical Open heads only like Dez, Wicked, etc.
let them vote.
peace
I'm topical...
^ Yeah but he thinks it's suspicous because
we used to be in the same crew....
To me it's BS
uppin x4.............................Vote honest.......
Yes Vote honest please.....
Stealing concepts isn't allowed....
And moderators need to see this pathetic crap.
He did it in LLL jr too with the feeding ish...
Alright well considering that im a topical/ mostly poetry person this will be a good and honest vote
Emotion-Even Though Se7en's story was true i would have to give the emotion to Bio becuase i felt that his pieces brought me in more and had me feeling like it happened to me... but both pieces was very well written...
Imagery-Again im going to have to give this to Bio... Se7en you had very good imagery and your piece drew me in when i was reading it but i just felt that bio's piece drew me into the piece more and was more indepth...
Structure-Im going to have to say this is a tie...even though se7en had the smaller font and if it was the same size it would be lager its not bigger so they are both equal to me...
Flow-This goes to Bio due to the fact that he had better rhyme scheme and his verse was more complex...the vocab was more complex and indepth and was all around more solid becasue se7en came really simplistic...
Creativity-im not going to give this to anyone because they both had the same concept and granted bio came first im not se7en so i dont know if he did go off of him or if it was already written...
good battle both but i just felt that bio took it
v/bio
Close, close, but I felt that Bio took this for putting more emotion after the fact. Both ahd the emotion, but I thought Bio focused more on the post break up than pre break up, and that's the reason he won. Great battle.
Vote: Bio
both did good. props to both. good luck.
Bio - First off props for yer verse mayne. I've always
thought of you as a text head, but it's nice to see peeps
branch out into other faucets of writing. Okay, i'll start with
the first half of your piece. For starters i thought you
did a nice job with the intro as it really had that sorta feel
to it. The last line or two seemed to be worded a bit weirdly
which i think had to do with to much focus on multies, but
no biggie. The second paragraph or stanza however felt
kinnda bland to me. I liked the art metas, yet i just lacked
the emotion that i thought it could've had. Not to take
away anything from you, because i know it's based on
personal experience, but i thought it could've been displayed
in a stronger fashion. The third part i personally thought
was were you made the strongest showing. I loved the metas
here, most notably the tree one, plus the word play
w/ kewl..."weather your bad storms alone". The emotion
was also strong, nice work. The fourth paragraph again
i felt kinda lacked, i dont know exactly what it was but
i just didnt feel it like the previous one. Still though
the emotion was apparent. Conclusion wise, not bad
but could have been a little better. Although this line
was just dope..." If you was to come back just would be more pain
just re-frame yourself in the picture ,alone I can maintain."
regardless i wasnt really feeling the ending, it just didnt
seem to fit after everthing she'd put you through. Yet
since it was a true story i suppose you can only say what
happened so i'll give that to you...all in all nice job duke.
Seven - wow dewd, really a nice job here. I've only seen a
few topical from you, but this one seriously impressed me,
good work. Anyways, let me break it down for ya.
Starting with the intro, i thought it was pretty good.
Similar to BC's it did a nice job of leading into the body
of the piece. Not much emotion, some nice imagery though.
The second part was definitley where you made your
strongest showing. Great emotion throughout, plus it
really made an impression on me being that some of the
things you conveyed i could seriously relate to. The
conclusion to me is where you sealed the deal.
Especially your last line, which was kewl. Basically it was
some what predictable but still i prefered it over Bio's
therefore...
v/ Seven..sorry Bio it was close, but i had to go w/ personal
preference on this one. Props to both and keep at it.
As our hearts began to melt, alot of seasons passed by.
So high on love, we passed heaven, just to reach it's skies.
Why we met each other, I'll never know, only God does.
Now our love is gone, past tense, it used to be, it was.
Kisses and hugs, just to show each other the amount we cared.
But in your time of needs and hurt, I was the only one there.
We shared joy, with no voids, just a life built for best.
We'd watch sun rise in the east, make love while it set in the west.
The rest of men treated you wrong, but I gave you my heart.
My soul, my love, my life, you helped all come out of the dark.
Things changed over time, my mind knew love was a crime.
But as our relationship collapsed, I pretended everything was fine.
You cheated on me, made me feel like shit, made me depressed.
Still I continued to love you so, my love for you grew no less.
Parts of me were given to you, I wanted you in all my lives.
Nobody could replace you, I'd pick nobody else, no other wives.
Is you came back, I'd never take you, just let depression reign.
Even if she changed, things between us will never be the same.
To everyone else reading this poem, here's a warning to heed.
If your love can't grow strong, then while would you plant the seed.
Seven-
fuck sorry, i accidently posted Sev's verse atthe end of my vote..
just disrregard it please. Again my bad.
My 5th and last upping...
Vote and I will return the favor.
I know I don't have enough post
so I will go on my Bio*Chemist
account.
Thanks for other votes and well
breakdowns. Oh yeah Se7en sorry
for the arguments earlier, close battle
indeed peace.
both verses were real real nice, and both had everything needed to get the vote, but bio's verse was more apealing to me, and thats the reason he got my vote....................BOTH were good.
vote=bio
damn excellent verses from both man fo real emotion and imagery made me feel like i was really there from both of you but imma have to say se7en took this shit by a pube hair his made me really feel it
vote/se7en
Both drop was kinda boring, work on transitions u fuckers. Bio had nice imagery emotions could been betta 7 was good 2 but kinda fell off and on....but overall i have to give it to
v/:Bio
close battle...............
bio you gave me a clear picture which...brought alot of emotion...the imagery was there..nuff said......the flow was tight....and i enjoyed reading the whole thing...i usually dont read the whole topical...but this kept me reading...
tight verse
Seven yours was also tight dawg....you brought alot of creativity...the structure was there to ( nothin special thou)...in your topical i was surprised because after the first few lines i thought it was gonna be boring but it turned out pretty nice.....but i was glued to Bio's verse so thats my final vote..
Bio
hit up my battlez if yall can