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Dang, I really liked this piece a lot.
Something about the way it just read so easily and also the repetition of the first line in slightly different ways throughout the piece really struck me. I loved it. Great imagery, and great ending. The ending is crucial and you nailed it. Nice work, I felt it.
^thanks ma, i really appreciate it coming from you, glad to have your opinion, elevation is key, 1luv.
i definately enjoyed this piece..your flow was water....truly...just flowing smoothly....and your content was greta, your creativity was above average..your syntax was superb, your diction was nice, beautiful assonance..and i can't remember the name of the literary device where you use repetitive soft sounds..but you used it well...beautiful poem
9.7/10
very good piece im feeling you on this and you must be around my age cuz ninja turtles was my shit too.basically i went through the same shit.i liked your concept on this cuz its something alot of people can relate to good drop :thumbup:
Thank you Sublime, im incredibly flattered by your generosity, and @ Shakes im glad that you enjoyed the read and that you were able to relate, thank you all for your feedback, i believe elevation is key, 1luv.