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karl - verse wasnt bad, some ok punches and a few good personals, structure was tight and flow was ight, you came harder.
other dude - blah at ur structure man, that was wack as fuck, wordplay was ight, but no personals in the verse and no real conenctin punches. work on droppin personals and dont bold ya multies man.
v/ karl
damn.... wonnish you shouldnt have to bold your rhyming words 4 the reader... almost a sign of a bad writer.. we know.. trust... you need to work on creativity.. i wasn't feeling much at all from you holmes... work on punches and personals... merks... i enjoyed reading your verse... you were witty and creative... came with solid flow/structure... you were hitting hard with punches and that line about his post count was just dope... good verse..
Vote Karl Merks...
Thanks for the vote's everyone, I like getting feedback. Especially if it's good! :thumbup:
Up.
Edit: Oh yea, I want to know if all of the wordplay was clear to you. Let me know if anything just went over your head. That kinda of feedback would be greatly appreciated.
Up for some feedback.
Vote Karl
What can I say, this was a merk. Karl took this battle with better punches and decenct personals. Both cam aight but Karl came through with a harder hitting verse.
Vote Karl
-Thewonnisheye.
You could be reading the bible but still not test-a-man(testament)
Drilling holes through yur entity leaving nothing but flesh at hand
cool flow with the multi, no wordplay, weak diss
See Karl, I'm eating yu always...for dinner and lunches
You could be Muhammed Ali buh still not deliver subliminal punches
straight flow, aight wordplay, predictable/weak punch
It's unquestionable the outcome of this battle, watch him flock like birds
Get fucked & hurt...now y'all know wuz good cuz KARL jus got MERKED
cool flow with the multi, aight wordplay, weak nameplay
Your end product is worth nothing kinda like printing without paper
Stop thinking i'm out playa...cause yur sinking like droughts cratered
cool flow, aight wordplay, aight punch
Slice yur guts, slay karl like mutton & meat, pork!
See yu cudn't "space" out pressing the most elongated button on yur keyboard
liked the flow again, aight wordplay, keyboard lines are played out
Yur cursed pal, yur family didnt have frowns on wen i buried u in a dirt mound
so i'm laughing at yu thinkin u had a chance winnin wen u get blasted in tha first round
cool multi with the flow, no wordplay, weak diss
-Karlmerks.
This dude's been biting, but I'll spare the details,
No, not his verse, stupid - I mean his finger nails!
average flow, coo wordplay, coo punch
Check the predictions kid, the winner is clearcut,
.... like Mother Nature turned to a filthy slut ....
average flow, aight wordplay, weak punch
I enjoy feeding on these fake kids- easy to chew,
Contain flaws - so 4/5 dentists recomend you.
average flow, coo wordplay, 2 biting/feeding lines in a verse is too much
It's hard to get personal with someone so new...
But it appears your post count's triple your I.Q!
average flow, aight wordplay, played out diss
Now let me mock your style cause it's stretched, played, and old,
And darkening your letters is the only time you'll come bold!!
average flow, forced wordplay, played to death punch
Seems RB's homeless; this wrapper get's slept on,
Now go back to writing verses with your crayon.
doesn't flow too well, aight wordplay, aight diss
Overall, Karl got this. He had the punches and wordplay, Eye had the flow. Wonnish, work on your creativity and punches mayne. You'll be decent once ya get that.
Vote - Karlmerks.
Karl Merks advances to Rd.2, closed.