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^^stop wasting peoples time then... come back when you can vote...
vote/ILL... why?
wright.. i didnt like your intro... mentioned 'person' 3 times.. i know it was only an intro, but still... also i thought your imagery was lacking, didnt built the picture as you could have.... also your vocab was pretty limited... too much simple rhyming in there... it wasnt all bad... some spots were ok.. jus lacked consistancy thru it...
ILL... this wasnt your best by quite a bit.... but it was still decent... your vocab was somewhat simplistic aswell, but you built the scene better, with the imagery..... and it seemed to progress better.... so you get my vote.....
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Yeah, like i said im up for another topical
this was my first, so i didnt really know how i should present it. i needed the criticism
Uppin, get this over with
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Uppin again, vote please........
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Wrightmak17- Did okay but i didnt really like it. Your wordplay and your imagery was bad i thought so need to elevate with that. Your rhymes wern't really good with the tropical i thought so really i see this is prolly your first tropical so you need to elevate on tropicals...but you stayed on topic so thats good...
Illunatic- I liked it thougth you did good with your imagery and wordplay, and also vocab. You stayed on topic...It really was good kinda told a lot bout your self and stuff but you get my vote for being more with the imagery stuff and the vocab and wordplay...
vote- Illunatic
