yeah ill hit your battle up.. thanks for dropping votes people.. now its 4 to 0.. we need a few more votes in this battle..
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yeah ill hit your battle up.. thanks for dropping votes people.. now its 4 to 0.. we need a few more votes in this battle..
this is my 5th up.. drop votes.. if you vote just leave a link you one of your battles and ill check it out.. peace
lolerz lolerz...
wackish battle..but hey.....
i think smiley took this battle just bechuz his verse was overrall better...any category imaginable i believe he took it in every aspect..think of a category nd he probably took it...his verse wasnt good though..just good enough to beat this....so.....
v/smiley
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damn what the hell why were all my votes in this battle taken away?
fuckin assholes.. i dont know how much more a vote can be explained .. yo if anyone else votes on this battle make sure to add like a page explanation.. fuckin crap
uppin this..i get 5 more ups since polls were reset.. drop a vote and leave links to your batles if you want.. peace
:) took this one with ease! Fubar you had some really played out rhymes! Try to be more unique and creative. No1 wants to hear.. or read rather what everybody else writes or says during a played out freestyle. You did have good vocabulary though. I just dunno why you bolded so many of the words. Anyways just work on your creativity and flow a bit and you'll notice a difference. Star line was. . .
You'll be filed into my cabinet for a loser with out hope//
Fools see you as a bi standard, you'll get rejected by the pope//
good stuff but kinda sketchy ...
:) you had some grimey lines man! Fuckin multis were ruining your opponent. You have good vocab and creativity. Structure and deilvery were good too! Your a good lyricist i wouldnt mind battling you one day. Heres your star line . . .
just bow down kid my RECORD IS STRONGER
i cant even rate your skills on a scale of 1 to 10 cuz id need to use NEGATIVE
NUMBERS
^^ GRIMEY!
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This is an okay battle.....i think smiley took it cuz his verse was nicer...he came with the stronger puches...nicer structure..and bettter flow.......fubar u have the right idea's just elevate more....
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this battle was not very good, but smiley took it easily. here's my break down of this.
flow- neither were very good because they were both very inconsistant. fubar constantly changing where the words rhymed in his bars didn't help. the end of your lines in a bar should always rhyme, unless you really know how to do it right, which you didn't. smiley, your bars were a very un-even length, which is awful for flow. you should try to make sure that all your lines are even length. try just adjusting some wording to make that happen.
multis- smiley, just for having them. they were nothing special from smiley but they were enough. fubar really didn't have any, even though it looked like he tried. they just didn't really rhyme though.
punches- even though they really weren't great, i still have to go with smiley. overall they were ok from you, you can still be much more creative. fubar, most of yours didn't make any sense. they just seemed to be saying random things. you even said he lacks stupidity. the thing is that it's a good thing to lack stupidity, because it means you'r not stupid.
wordplay- i didn't see any. you should both start using wordplay because it can really strenghnthen punches, when done right. it also shows some creativity.
personals- it looked like smiley again because he at least used them. still could have been better but at least he used em. fubar, your personals, like your punches, didn't make sense.
structure- again smiley. basicly he didn't use any extra shit, he just let the verse be, which is the right thing to do. fubar, stop using all that bolding and extra stuff, it really doesn't bring anything and is anoying to read.
overall- smiley took it with far superior punches, multis, personals and structure. no hate to either one, just means you got work to do. just keep eevatin, no one is ill when they first start. much respect to both.
v- smiley
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krakajack i got you man.. ill vote on that shit later.. uppin
uppin
good looks on the up thing........................
aight fuck it................................smiley had fucked up struc
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i felt that his punches on the other hand was hitting consistent
...........other cat seemed to be herbish all over and fucked his
........................so in contrast to that personals go to smiley
and well capslocks was on and it was gay on smileys verse
..........................dont ever do that again it made me very mad
both can elavate and espeacialy fubar cuz the bold letters killed it
.......................dont ever do that again man its whack as fuck
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id say flow and shit like that was poor on both sides needed work
.................cuz like i said i didnt like neither structure in this one
creativity goes to both but slightly in favor of smiley do to effort
.............mataphors in this one were kinda stupid just lacking shit
id like to see more multis but..............there was some ok wons here
....but smiley takes them................................fubar lacked them
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so basicly vote/smiley for hitting with better punches and personals
i kno thats shits been said 1000 times or more but that wins battles
and also i like to mention that smiley was wittier which also helped him
....................................vote on my damn battles and dont forget man
well i mean please return the honest favor ok man thank you very much
fubar u did good but smiley i felt hiz emotion and it made more sence
man uppin this shit for the last vote in this biatch....