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ok i saw super is still battlin thought i would drop a vote to see how
he is progressing..
so i will break these down and drop an honest vote..
Look at this guy "firez" he remains undead//
Hes new this this website so he wack from his legs to his head,
first line didnt make much sense to me, 2nd just didnt hi t at all
Let me get the over wit and make sure im done//
Becuz im about to make this new guys record zero and one,
first line was blah not a good setup, second line is filler,
weak attempt at a personal
This guy must be white or must be hation//
The only guy this guy will be suffering his discrimmination
sorry, this was not good, first line wasnt a good setup,
second was just a weak punch...
This guy is a rerun and thats what he says everday//
Imma do you like "Burger King said have it your way",
didnt really get the first line, 2nd line was not a punch at all
it did not diss your opponent in no way, shape, or form
This guy must be like 18 workin at pizza hut//
He be probably be beating his meat at 3:00 am watching BET UNCUT,
first line was blah again, any type of beating your meat punches are played
it was funny though lol
But thats ok we still can be friends//
Imma act like Al Pacino(Scarface) and say hello to my little friend,
work on your setups, 2nd line in no way dissed your opponent
its filler, should be a punch
Let me get out of this thread becuz i think its all done,
Let me get back to my T.V show becuz i just made your record zero and one
setup wasnt good it was filler, 2nd line, didnt really diss the guy, plus
you already stated that your were going to make his record "zero and one"
didnt need to state it again
most of your verse was filler, focus on embarrasing your opponent and not what you are going to do to him...
overall not a good verse. rhymes are elemetary....needs work
keep reading other battles..try to be more witty, and diss your opponent
thats what battling is all about
aight..
As My Volume-Increases, I leave X's On your Bars Like a Malcom Thesis, 'dropping Super Flows quicker than angry Fans on Album Releases
actually this was not a bad opener, nothing special but not bad
Wit astounding pieces ..I keep Levy's Worthy, Plugging '72' in your back like an Ecko Jersey, thinking Your records Steady ..This Faggot plays Beverly Hill cocks/cops Like gay versions of Eddie Murphy
i see the multis, punch wasnt very clear, and it was extremely stretched
structure needed to be touched up a bit...
Record's Steady ..I'm 'Rearing' Wins like Porn Competions, While in rap, Ac'cord'ing to nurse commisions, Super Flow stays under the weather like he was 'born' in poor condition*
rule of thumb :thumbup: ,porn punches are very played, cant even flip them shits no more, stay away from them...it was still stretched, fix structure again here..
I spawn Admission's & Like bad tempered Clothes Designer's, I rip his 'material' ...an Imperial thriller, Making Sure another Loss 'dawns' Upon Super Flows, Like a Cerial Killer**
this was decent, mostly filler, you are simply stating that you will be giving him another loss, what so special about that..diss him, make him feel like nothing, thats your goal
He "Flow's" a Bacterial river, Don't get your raps blocked, Cause you couldn't murk me Like that verse itself, Chances are you'll get your 'cap's locked'
didnt see a well stated punch, you are hiding behind multis and flow
but aint throwing any serious punches..
(Ac'cord'ing <~~Umbilical cord)*
A loss, a life ...Dawn, in the morning, cerial ..you eat in the morning, get it)**
dont ever do this, if people dont get your punches they shouldnt vote
explained punches are very newbish..i know some sites do it, but it gets looked down on here aight
overall your verse was mostly filler too, diss the kid, stop building yourself
up to make you look better than him, embarass him
work on structure a bit, flow is decent, multis are cool, but its not that necessary, i would stress them too much..focus on punches too
firez had the better verse here
read my comments, dont take them to heart
it just my opinion, but i am sure most vets would feel the same
if you need help pm
i'll try to help the best i can
v/firez
yo.WHoever votes for me.I will hook them up with a vote in there battle.Only people that people for me I will hook yall up with a vote in yalls battle.So Holla and Holla at me
Oh man...I'm pretty sure you're gonna be in trouble for this!
I can't believe you're trying to buy votes, dude. Born to Kill
Damn, man, trying to sway votes are we?
You need reported fag
I didnt mean it like that yo.I mean to vote in my battles ill drop the link soon and then Ill hit up yo votes that I forgot to do.YOu cant try to get me banned for that,Quote:
Originally Posted by Super Flows
rite wack battle to be honest both came wack with structure
and no real hard punches...but firez did make a good
effort here as he did have a lil wordplay with a few punches
and also included personals.......super came mad played and wack
to be honest no flopw and really newbish punches that simple
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pretty close battle in my opinion, both of ya's structure's coulda been a hella lot better. Superflow buddy....your punches didn't really hit that hard....none of em did. Your verse was pretty simple and your vocab was blah. FireZ easily took this. He had better punches, better vocab. Pretty much took everything in this battle. Keep elevatn and all that good shit.
Vote Firez
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