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I was a n00b once too, I know how it was..I'll try and start this up...
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this bitch couldnt blow up in fame..... so stop the charade
.................well, unless i threw him a hand grenade
Poor opener, second line really hurt the flow
renegade, you're my gatorade..... the way you rehydrate
my dehydration for victory, watch my glory as i stomp on you
Didnt rhyme at the end..wack bar anyways though..
ill leave you with ounces of lead in your chest... im the best
break your bones.... to leave your body like a curved crest
Weak..be more creative.."im the best" <-- wack
you want me to drop first..... so then you can runaway
and use my lines elsewhere.... the only weed you ever see
is seaweed..... so i suggest you get milk
cause cal(call),cuim(see them)-calcuim, and you die quick
^ Didnt know where the bars broke off..you need to stay consistent in your verse man..seperate it bar by bar..closer was wack as hell..
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Spook-
This Guys Got Perpetual Mixed Up With His Wack "Perspective"
Already Contracted SpooKs Illness He Just Dont Realise He's "Affected"
blah, ok opener, second line has been used to death tho, just in different forms
Somebody Get Trough To The Guy Im On Anotha Level Or "Dimension"
I Got There By Talent..You Spat Ya Heart And Barely Got "Attention"
Wasnt feeling this..
Im Sorry To Be The One To Tell You "Raps Not The Way Perpetual"
Must Be Done....It Would Help If You Gain Abit Mor Rap "Intellectual"
I'm starting to notice a pattern of basic punches..
Your Name Doesnt Explain You And Do You Quite Enough "Justice"
Give Him Some Heat Reppellant Gloves..But He Still Cant "Touch This"
Uh...at least you tried to be creative here...still kinda wack
I Really Would Spend More Time On You But You Just Plain "Weak"
Tenth Line...Half Time..Your Useless Im Goin For A "Leak"
Filler
You Could Spit all Day But I Couldnt Really Be Bothered To "Here"
Its Not That I Dont Want To But Ur Spittin Verbal "Diorreha"
Poor rhyme scheme here, wack line again..
Your Disgustin Me Like A Pedo Or A Cocky Suckin "Perv"
Ill Water You And Feed You But Ull Always Be A "Herb"
This is prolly one of your better lines..still showing newbish stuff tho
Tell This Cocksucker Imma Fuck Him Up And Leave Him In Bad "Condition"
Sent By His Boss To Beat Me..Better Tell Him You Failed The "Mission"
No. Filler. Blah.
Aight Im Done Its Been A Fun time With You As A "host"
Give It A Day To Get My Easy 5 Votez to win..And Thats At The "Most"
Wack closer bro..
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Ok, both of you guys need to elevate. I aint hating, but do you know what personals are? You gotta use them in order to win battles. Both need to up their potential quickly. Read other vets battles. Learn off what they do and their styles.
Since I have to choose one, I'm gunna have to go with Spook..simply because he came less newbish..but still...you both need to elevate..No hate.
Vote / Spook
Good luck here on Rb guys.
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Read the rules.
Only 5 Upp's allowed.
You could get banned man..
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It Should be In The Rules For People To Vote On Battles Aswell
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Spook,
If you want to try and talk shit in my free agent thread,
I hope you'll be able to back it up with a verse as "ass"
as that! haha
Signed,
TruthZ
