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First off.. a very good battle on both sides.
Oblivion Shadow- I felt the emotion in this post. You really gave your heart it seems. You had a good flow going, but the word play wasnt there. So.. umm.. no. I cannot vote for you.
Wogzsta- Not much word play, actually none.. lol. but ya flow did have it a bit better, and you did have good Words in it. Good Imagery!
Vote- Wogzsta
Oblivion Shadow - content in this was pretty good - I could feel the emotion - but the imagery was lacking somewhat because a good number of your lines seemed forced - the thoughts were awkwardly worded to acomplish the rhyme as well - the core of this piece was very nice - but it didn't seem to be built on very well
wogzta - the beginning to this felt kinda flippant I guess - just was like dada dada da - dada dada da - but the ending became made it stick in my mind more - implemented your multi's pretty well throughout - your flow was on point - closer was nice - maybe could be worded a little differently but it's nice as is
v/ wogzta even if he did somehow miss my multi's in every line, usually even multiple times in each line...
nice battle.
Oblivion- great verse man. very unique way to come and express your memory. i felt the emotion from basically the entire letter. the thing i didn't like tho was your structure, it through off your flow and messed up how it was read. but other than that man, that was a nice verse. but you could've done better on imagery i think.
Wogzta- beautiful imagery, starting with your first line. your memory was produced as if i could remember it to. very interesting read. kept my attention throughout the whole thing basically. perfect structure, perfect flow. nice vocab too. i don't think you came at top when it came to emotion, but you took everything else. great battle. props to both.
vote- Wogzta
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Oblivion - I really liked your verse. It was great. Imagery was really good, but could've been better, but I still liked it. I liked the way how you expressed your memory, coz I could feel the emotion in your verse. Structure was good, but not amazing. Flow could've been better.
wogzta - That was a really good verse. Almost everything was perfect. I also liked the way how you expressed everything in it. Imagery was good too, actually it was almost perfect. Structure and flow were perfect. Emotion was good too, but could've been better.
Vote - wogzta
R.O.L.M.A.O at the kid that said u had to have wordplay for a topical,
^These kids need votes this battle be old
Alright...
First off, outstanding verses on each side
rule- You had a really nice verse, I loved the style you attempted and I think you did it very well, good imagery, really everything about it I liked but I'm not so sure it was the best idea for this topic... I saw where u were coming from and all, it was still very good but the idea could've been better suited for the topic
wogsta- bueatiful verse on ur side as well, you came at it with definitely an original approach in which I really liked.. the closing was best for the piece I think, it all came together reall nice at the end, great imagery and feeling in this piece and just.. overall dope
vote- wogsta... very close
Props guys.