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dammit thing. do you always forget too poll your votes?
lol...uppin to finish.
peace
yo both did good
stryk...ur flow was good...u were 2 simple.....and ur structure wasnt good..
ace...structure better dan stryks..flow was good...
overall........i think ace takes dis one better story...better structure..and better flow
Ace mustah had somethin up his sleeve on this one cause he destroyed it in that 2nd verse. That was definately a good read. Stryk u had a couple good lines but u know u couldah done better so i wont hastle u
Unexplained, invalid vote. Disqualified. -ILLunatic
thanx man. i appreciate. even if it doesn't count. haha. uppin
Yo ace you killed it man...
easily got this one bro...
the flow was water, and it was a decent read..
V-Ace,..
Hit me up with a topical battle if you want..
peace
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Kinda of a blow out here...
Stryk had only one memorable line...
cuz then youd be like spiting like Slim... when hes on a diet
That was nice, everything else seemed to be a bit off kilter.
Some lines were stretched, others were very short.
Hurt ya flow some, man.
Not to mention, this was pretty much the exact story as "Lose Yourself".
Nothing very original, and it closed like a book missing it's last page.
Ace, while, you also went with an "8 Mile" theme, you at least came structured perfectly.
Lines not too long, not too short. All about the same length.
Made for very nice flow.
You used better vocab, better imagery, and touched on emotion more than Stryk did.
Story, concept, totally played and eh...
But made readable by Ace, so he get's this win.
Peace
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thanx.
lo....damn styk9 u sucka t topical ......
.....overrall a very weak battle from styk9
but ace okay ..seen uve done better .....
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line from ace:
The questions echo within my mind, I hide behind my seat
A heartbeat away to enrage my face with victory or defeat
My palms embalm perspiration, desperate for more direction
The words I thirst are unheard at first to prevent my perfection
So the doubt seems to grow as I’m a step closer to performing
Recollecting images of my scripts in the form of brainstorming
Close my eyes to recite a prayer, then look my face in the mirror
^^ okay goos shyt
line from styk9:
And suddenly your lungs quit and your ther waiting for your tungue to unstick
And your sweating like youve got "the runs" slick and you shoulda been done quick.
^^^ blah wack!!!
breakdown:
flow: ace , descent
mutlies: none
strcture:ace,
enjoy readin:ace, good flow,
stayed on topic: ace, iight
opener:ace, need alittle work
closer:ace, nice
v/ ace of aces...........
thought he came better ....had mostly everything better ....
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stryk9 u really need to elevate...and
need to do more topical.... iight no beef.... lata
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Yo this was nice.. both verses were good but unfortunately.. only one really stood out to me... Before I read the topic I read tha verses an try to figure out wat the topic is by what they say.. An which ever one is more clear to me.. then thats wat gets my vote.. When I read Strky's verse.. I had an understanding of what it was but I felt that you coulda came more creative an more descriptive.. There was some meaning to it but I think it woulda been better if the vocab was chosen a little more carefully.. Ace however... when I read your verse.. it painted the perfect picture in my head.. like what you were saying was actually happening.. nice verse man.. had nice metas an tha flow was just on point.. Im gonna give this one to Ace of Aces based on flow, creativity, vocab, an descriptions.... Keep up tha good work..
no hate.. but feel free to hit up the link in my sig.. thanx yall