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Liked the intro.... concept was done well, and I really don't think the flow was too bad, maybe a little too slow in the slower parts, but the thing for me was your voice - it sounds like you're not putting a style into it, like you're almost just talking. It's missing that punch, that core strength that would give it a moving effect... you're flowing too soft for the song. Jus step it up a bit and put a couple add-ins to the slow parts of your verse to pick it up, this will make a good song. Nice lyrics by the way
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i like the intro love the subject but u droped in to your rap too
quick, beautiful lyrix nice flow on second vrese was a little off
beat, third verse bad u used the same thing twice but over all
8/10 great
hit mine up and leave fedback plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=121415
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i can't stand to listen to another 9/11 track yo....
you sound like your spittin through a phone reciever too... and this beat is mad empty... your flow and emotion need work, sounds like your reading.
basically this needs mad work...and on the 3rd verse.. i question if you even wrote these lyrics to this beat.
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^harsh but thanx man i work with what i got.........and yea i know it sounds weird...i fucked up the hard limiting on cool edit i think .........thanx for the feedback look for my next one though gonna be straight fire....
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Returnin' the favor....
Yhea um I don;t know if you using Phaser effect or you eqing but you using the type of effects that cats use when they wanna sound like they on the phone...
and not to sound insisitive..cuz you might have some significatce to it..but um not really moved by the whole 9/11 thing no more.....and I mean, I feel like if you wanted to get emotional it's a whole lotta shit done happened since then to talk about..and for a topic like this it would seem that you would have a little more emotion....
Keep working on it....
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^aprreciate the feed .....kind of all ready mastered though so pontless to work on...maybe i could just pretend i was singin this one over the phone to my friend..ehehe
