ILLunatic v.s Timeless (topical)

Illunatic....you had a good rhyme. Flow was on and off, but the rhymes were good are the vocab was good. The emotion in you piece was a little above average, and the vocab was a little bit better. Overall this peice was a well done piece. Coulda picked up the vocab at times. This was an average piece for you.

Timeless.... I like the 2 perspective style. The Warden one was decent...the flow was a little off but the emotiona nd imagry came off real well. The Prison point of view wasn't as good. I tseemed repetative at times, and while some of this was probably intentional, it made the piece lag at some times. But you still had the emotion and imagry in ya piece and thats waht took this battle for you.

Vote=Timeless

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Hmm..

Two very different approaches..

Ill.. You took the better approach in my eyes.. You didnt use any transitions really.. But.. As you didnt use any.. It was consistent.. Nice take on the topic.. Creative..

Time.. I wasnt feeling your approach.. The two seperate paragraphs didnt really pull it off on this topic.. You had some nice transitions.. But why didnt you keep it consistent? Sometimes you had them.. Others you didnt.. Flow, vocabulary and so on were all ok..

Close battle..

Just thought Ill's verse was more creative..

v/ Ill..

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Thank you..

Pz..

Uh.... Honestly nice topical on both parts however I felt that Illunatic took this.. His came wit a little more feeling.. When I read his its like he was actually there an stuff.. Yo timeless I liked the two different perspectives that was tite.. but its just seemed sorta off.. like u werent really feelin it.. didnt put too much effort into it... Illunatic you had a better flo also.. Timeless.. ur rhymes scheme sorta just seemed to be thrown together like watever so....
Based on flow... structure.. an emotion.. my vote goes to Illunatic..

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stop deletein my votes ILL, let the other mods do it. it isnt fair that you should!!!!

People are AIM'n me about it, and no other IR mods are on
-ILLunatic

impressed by both drops but overall i tink time had a better verse as he came with more creativity and it was easier 2 picture his.....illunatic u had a nice verse aswell and was very creative but sum of your stuff was a bit basic

illunatics best line

But damn...i robbed a bank, just to end up in this disgusting place
So many fights go down, felons dont even confront face to face


times best line

Bagged, with my last view I see the warden smiling of which I’m met..
…Life now in hands of evil, I wish god would wipe my outstanding debt!!

overall tho both approaches were good but times was more creative and was easier 2 picture i enjoyed reading both verses tho

vote time pz

^ brought to my attention,
that is a crew vote.

^^ you didnt say no crew votes and he is on probation, which means he aint in our crew yet!!

aiight very good topical i enjoyed to read this from both sides.........

Ill.. you seem to approach the battle very nicely and got straight to the topic and you didnt fuck about with a build up.your vocab was ok but some was a bit simple, if ya get me...your closer was nice and simple you finished it well,you had some good points in here such as...

Quote:

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Originally Posted by ILLunatic

I shoulda thought things first, and turned back
Now i'm in prison, and theres no way to turn that

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Time.. nice starter you approached the battle well, you didnt fuck about either, you seemed to hav a good view on death row, you ha some good points in there...

Quote:

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Originally Posted by timeless

Tears of regret, fury and hate, reminded by these opening gates
Which paralyse my bone as they run down my face...

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closer was very good you finished it well.......

\/0te... timeless

very good battle not a topic i would use but you both used it very well....

Eh.. No crew votes is a common rule..

ILL... NEVER handle your own battle. Post in IR and wait like every other member. :nono:

I'm sorry.
Dont know what i was thinking

aines is in timeless's crew. crew votes not allowed therefore vote removed.

Timeless - i was feeling your verse it was ok and i felt the imagary really good but i felt u wasn't being original some of ur lines was forced and u need to just elevate a little bit and ur structure was not bad either

Ill i was also feeling your too u had nice imagary needs a little work and shit and i was feeling ur scheme and it was a simply and uncomplen verse and i liked that and the same for ur structure it was ok also and i wa feeling the personafication and the vocab can be a lil bit better

My vote

Ill
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