Illtalic, Lyric & DeMiurgiC: "No One Listens"

Much appreciated wogzta.. nice analysis.

Up!

please?

It was iight, you know..

Erm..

Could of all had smoother transititions.. And in some cases you could of actually HAD transitions..

Nice multi's from illtalic in places..

All had nice flow..

Was a iight collaboration from y'all..

All of you hit something in my sig..

Battle preferably.. But any OM will do if your feeling lazy..

Thanks..

Pz..

^i don't call that a critique but aight i'll hit your shit up anyway.......

I thought this shit was madd ill.

Illtallic had very good flow. and some nice metaphors. word usage was nice. rhymescheme wasn't as good as the other 2, but the last line was very creative. 7.5/10

Lyric had a little choppy of a flow, but the rhymes picked it up. he stayed on topic, just like illtallic, and killed it with some lines. very good verse, just coulda used a little bit of doctoring to fix the flow in some parts. the ending to this was cool too, b/c it ended similar to illtalics. 8.0/10

DeMiurgiC came really good in this. Flawless flow. Vocabulary was sick. Good rhymes at some parts, the others had weak rhymes but the vocab and metaphors made up for it. showed alot of emotion. 8.5/10

overall, I give this a 8.0/10

very nice piece, with all of your skills combined. Illtallic had the flow, lyric had the rhymes, and demiurgic had the vocab and metaphors. keep this shit up.

this was a create piece of rap
no one droped a bad verse which is important for a multi mc collabaration, i would say lyric came of the best with his
"No one listens to my words, why am I lyrically unheard
I know I have much to learn, but why has this negligence occured?
Battle talent is unnoticed, no matter what form of dopeness is posted
Vets write hate and then bold it, say quit now, there's still no hope kid"
it was a great beggining which kept me interested aswell as it being very true.

DeMiurgiC probally came off the worse NO DISRESPECT you were still really good it's just you didn't have any really standout lyrics but you kept a constant quality throughout.

i thought ittalic rhyme sceme was a bit basic but what he was chatting about was solid and true
"My existence is hollow yet my thoughts are dense"
this is just a buff lyric

all together this was a great piece, respect to everyone

shit if your mouths taped shut how can you rap

nice piece every thing flow got alot feeling to it

Decent subject... I've only seen a couple pieces like this

Decent execution... flow, wordage, etc. was all above par

Nice transfer of emotion/imagery...
Good shit fellas.