i liked this wize ways really nice..good structure and nice flow...i enjoyed tha multis and ...th wordplay was nice could be worked on a bit but it was still nice man... keep it up kuz I liked it...LataZ....
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i liked this wize ways really nice..good structure and nice flow...i enjoyed tha multis and ...th wordplay was nice could be worked on a bit but it was still nice man... keep it up kuz I liked it...LataZ....
Thanks
Scheme was ehh, but you had some complex things in here that attracted me to it. It was short and to the point. Flow was ok, fluid at the start, tampering off near the end, watch out for that. This was good for what it was, I liked it. You kept me reading and the ending was good. Nice job. Keep dropping. Pz.
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Very interesting concept, haven't seen this topic done before... I like how you made something so complicated seem simple... You explained it with some good metaphorical use and imagery..
Even now my intelligence capacity is untapped and
Untouched but against yours..I'll win..it'll happen
The second line in this bar was forced, you can't tell me it wasn't... Just try make ya rhymes smooth and not forced, it will help your flow also, which was off a bit at times, especially where you have the forced rhyme...
Overall a pretty good piece.. Just work on a couple tings...
Could you hit my piece in my sig? It would be hella preciated...
Thanks peace....