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Rhymes - Grisly
structure - Grisly
metas - Breth
punches - Tie
personals - Grisly, Breth just sayin his name don't count
Vote - Grisly
Explaination:
Grisly's first half was real tight so i was kinda disapointed by his second half. All those personals he used were fuckin hiliarious and he actually used personals, which was a plus. Breth's fat person line and insectacide line were the only part of his flow that i liked. His structure was hard to follow and i didnt think his rhymes were particularly complex. Grisley rhymed more and better and the structure was well established, as u could feel the punch commin'. clear win for grisly. fav line of bout
"Yo call me grisly the missile, the way I sink these battleships
I hide emcees skill like the moon does during a lunar eclipse
So shut your lips, my scripts are barbeque like Herr’s chips
And I kill big birds, like nothing, equipped with a few clips"
Yo ya'll hit up my battles and re-pay the favor. Check out JzEx first, he wrote his shit and i wanna close some of these battles so i can start a new on. Vote honest please!
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^^^ Quit voting in my battles you fucker, do you have something against me???
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um....this was a slaughter
Grist-
Yo call me grisly the missile, the way I sink these battleships
I hide emcees skill like the moon does during a lunar eclipse
this is bad...weak, and played, plus it doesn't really work as much of a punch
So shut your lips, my scripts are barbeque like Herr’s chips
And I kill big birds, like nothing, equipped with a few clips
I kill big birds? You have the idea, and this was an ok attempt at a personal, but could have been much harder with better wording...and by saying that your scripts are barbeque is that supposed to be a diss in some sort of way?
I changed the name and now the flows get fully reputable acclaim
Wannabee unregistered rapper wit big bird under your name
*sigh*..again with the big bird thing...this was even worde than your previous bar
Your under my game, so I claim the blame for giving you shame
You can proclaim that we aint the same, and truth is, your right on aim
ok...you've got multis....but those are useless unless you make good punches out of them, which you are not doing...you are focusing way too much on flow and not enough on dissing your opponent
I possess 30 more times the power of your rhymes inside my mindframe
A single verse contains enough acid and chemical mixture to defy flame
um....are you in chemistry class or something? and once again, read the above comment
So try and tame, and youll end up in a vacant lot somewhere in pain
Beating you with chains, out of your range.............Then I drown your username
prob your best bar...but still was weak, too many multis and not strong enough punches
Brethren-
You better recognize, Grisly buggin me, so I inject him with insectacide,
IceMan fucking around with DOTS in his verse, so we could connect the lies,
eh...this was aight
Nobody will forget this ass-whooping, they will always forever knew ours,
Only time you !!Leaving~Minds~Blank!! is erasing people's cue cards,
lol...nice
A few bars, that's all it takes, like a little TCS . . . .
I'm like bad directors, I'm not even letting your species rest,
pretty good
You faggot, wait till I drop, why can't you just restrain from pulling my belt,
Grisly is like a fat person eating his own arm . . . . he's full of himself,
haha..this was tight
I dice your throat, perform some shit from Morkat Kombat, needle's implodes,
Only time Grisly brings smiles is after fogging up people's windows,
lol...pretty good punch..although please do not use mortal kombat in a battle ever again
No questions, Ice hands me his status gratefully, damn it's your fitness,
This bitch needs to learn his roll, kinda like ametuer gymnasts.
decent, but not great
Overall-The two people who have voted so far are dumb fucks. Ok, breth had no personals, but his punches hit, and he didn't need to force multis in every bar for us to get the flow. Grisly had a couple attempts at personals, but they were terribly worded and weak. You got skill, man, but focus less on multis and more on punches, that will make your verses MUCH better. Not that breth's verse was anything special, but it was more than enough to take this battle with ease.
Vote-Brethren
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ya brethren got this had some creative shit just look at his verse
came witty too and had some damn wittyness man did i say that already?
anyways other cats verse wasnt too bad but punches was kinda soft compared to ya kno. . . .
besides its not like this battle was ne thing special but just liked some bars that brethren had givin use. . . .vote/Breth. . . .
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uppin 4 or 5.......................................
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uppin #3, ^^^^^^ True, True .
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Uppin #4, this battle's been up for about a month now you fucktards
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No more upps now, please let's get some fucking votes
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Brethren:
Damn, these lines were beautiful;
"You faggot, wait till I drop, why can't you just restrain from pulling my belt,"
"No questions, Ice hands me his status gratefully, damn it's your fitness,
This bitch needs to learn his roll, kinda like ametuer gymnasts."
^I dont really know who "Ice" is tho? maybe I dont get that. But tha punch was nice, I haven't seen it before.
Didn't like ur structure tho, some stretched out lines, but ur mulit-sylable rhymes were nicely put together. You also had tha better punches.
Gris/Reg:
Buddy, u gotsta punch a lot harder. Your structure and multis were great, but u lacked in punches. You won in tha areas of multis n structure, but lacked wit and had a few wack lines.
Brethren wins through consistent punches.
V/ Brethren.
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Shit...I didnt realize I cannot poll...well...when I can, I will.
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this battle has been open for almost a month wtf....
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Yo call me grisly the missile, the way I sink these battleships
I hide emcees skill like the moon does during a lunar eclipse
no punch at all, dont self glorify
So shut your lips, my scripts are barbeque like Herr’s chips
And I kill big birds, like nothing, equipped with a few clips
no...weak punch, punch aside..."equipped with clips"?
I changed the name and now the flows get fully reputable acclaim
Wannabee unregistered rapper wit big bird under your name
meh...better than your previous lines
Your under my game, so I claim the blame for giving you shame
You can proclaim that we aint the same, and truth is, your right on aim
??????? nice multies but, "your right on aim"?? if youda put a punch..
I possess 30 more times the power of your rhymes inside my mindframe
A single verse contains enough acid and chemical mixture to defy flame
i liked this one...but no punch...was self glorifation
So try and tame, and youll end up in a vacant lot somewhere in pain
Beating you with chains, out of your range.................................
self glorification....diss him not make yourself look good
Overall, man....make punches. "Im bad and big and ill split your wig" shit aint workin... no hate for real but i mean you gotta try and diss him. Other than that, 3/4 of your verse was rhyming with "aim"... Metas were good i think, kinda helped. Structure and flow was on point. Just make punches.
You better recognize, Grisly buggin me, so I inject him with insectacide,
IceMan fucking around with DOTS in his verse, so we could connect the lies,
i dont know why...but this 3rd dot in sig line ive seen...? w/e
Nobody will forget this ass-whooping, they will always forever knew ours,
Only time you !!Leaving~Minds~Blank!! is erasing people's cue cards,
lmao, good meta punch..
A few bars, that's all it takes, like a little TCS . . . .
I'm like bad directors, I'm not even letting your species rest,
didnt like...kinda weak punch
You faggot, wait till I drop, why can't you just restrain from pulling my belt,
Grisly is like a fat person eating his own arm . . . . he's full of himself,
lol, nice meta, good punch
I dice your throat, perform some shit from Morkat Kombat, needle's implodes,
Only time Grisly brings smiles is after fogging up people's windows,
lmao! Best line of battle
No questions, Ice hands me his status gratefully, damn it's your fitness,
This bitch needs to learn his roll, kinda like ametuer gymnasts.
ok finisher i guess
Overall, you didn't really lack in anything. You got this cuz............................................... ........................you threw punches? Ya...no hate regicide...but this was one easily by punches.
V/ Bretheren
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Breth murdered you Reg. You started saying you hide skills? Please, let them out LOL
vote - Breth for better punches, wordplay and harder hits.
pz
now go vote on me and born, and vote honestly.
and damn it Ill don't dq my vote, you know I explained it enough. not much more to say, don't need a novel for every vote
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Brethren fucked this up...
Sorry, Reg...
Much more of an assault, Reg talked alot, multi'd alot, and predicted alot...
But punching? Nah...not too much at all.
Plus, don't herb ya verse with bold lettering, that's really annoying.
You concentrated on the wrong things in this battle.
You went for multi's and metas, but totally forgot punches.
Re-read ya verse, you'll see that actual insults aren't there.
The closest you came was that "mindframe" line...
Brethern ripped this.
Flat out.
The "dots" line, the "fogging windows" one, "full of himself" and the closer pretty much sealed it. Nice wit, nice clowning with all of those...
Alot more offensive, better wordplay and metas, overall...no contest at all.
Brethern
Peace
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Aiight Brethren Got this one harder hitting punches and followed through with most of the hard punches.. flow was good bit patchy in places.. structure was pretty steady.. Wordplay was good you used it well..
Regicide.. Some god punches but you needed to follow through with them. but you didnt you just stopped.. rest of the punches were weak.. flow was nice and steady.. structure was pretty steady but a bit off in some places.. wordplay was ok could of been better..
\/0te. Brethren
