ILLunatic v.s BI Detained (topical)

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bi detained - structure was good.......flow was pretty good.....vocab was nice......metas were good........wasnt to much wordplay........i didnt see alot of imagery.......i didnt really think that the topic went to well with ur verse......it would have been good as a regular open mic, but not as a topical..........

illunatic - structure was good.......flow was good......vocab was pretty good........some of the metas were nice........i didnt see alot of wordplay........the imagery was definately there.........i liked how u brought out the topic......it was nicely done.....

breakdown -
structure - tie
flow - ill
vocab - tie
metas - bi
wordplay - tie
imagery - ill
topic - ill
creativity - bi

conclusion - illunatic takes this with better flow, imagery, and i liked how he he wrote about the topic better.....so he gets my vote......

VOTE - ILLUNATIC

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I guess Incorporation dunny count?
oh well...finish this off

I wonder how long it will take for this to get closed
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Yup. I already voted. You should no who I am.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...55#post1215355

Get that for me.

I don't got one vote!

So hard being a newbie ;)

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Ok. .

B.I. - I read your verse in Open mic and it's quite good, but you just kind of missed the topic. . everything was good, don't get me wrong. . but you definately could've touched the topic better. . Imagery lacked, and that's a flaw when writing topicals. . the key to a topical is the first 5 letters of the word. . Topic. . and you lost this because of the lack of detail put into the actual topic.

ILL - Felt your verse. . very deep. . you hit the topic much more closer than BI did. . everything was nice and you had some imagery in there that helped alot, like getting detention for attention. . you can picture yourself getting in trouble but still getting shunned by your mother. . good job with that. . You narrowly beat out BI because of the simple fact that you just stayed on topic more.

So, considering the topic and verses. . ILL hit the topic better, so ILL gets the vote. Pz.