Mind Spoken [feat] ELEETE

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But ur very true...My sig does need to be re-decorated.....

Uppin this yo!!

this is a nice lil collab you got there....im gonna have to say that eleete was nicer with his verse than dev was....i mean with lines like "You are all the reason I was split into ELEMENCE
Cause according to you ELEETE's flow was always irrelevant"...and that "remain in stealth" line was tight too...i mean i'd rewind that if i was listening to it.... i could understand where your comming from with that drop.....dev, yeah you did start off kinda slow...but you picked it up towards the middle and the end..you had a couple tight lines in there too..."That’s why im rhyming this simplicity..." and "Yes, the concept remains… it’s the audience that changes" (i was just thinking along the lines of that this morning...wondering why people start hating on the rappers that they build up to be so great....is it the music changes?...or the people listening??) anyway....dev yours was tight too...but it just seemed a lil hard to follow...with the "yes..." interruptions and pauses......and eleete you havent really shown me any weakness in your storytelling yet...even though i've only seen like 2-3 of your drops lol (and this one seemed kinda short) but this makes me wanna peep the next one....aiight im out

hey this shit is tight I agree wit them I think eleete was a little better but overall raw

Pure dopeness here... Imagery was indescribable... Topic was original... and the flow was unstoppable... This shit truly came from the heart, not the tongue. Deep and emotional.. Structures were set up nice.. I also noticed some nice wordplay in there... Dope piece guys.. Keep at it..

Peace.

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You both came pretty strong on this. Eleete had more emotion it seemed but Dev had some nice insights there which I think some might miss. I'll break 'em down separately.

Eleete
Flow was very nice - I've noticed some improvement in just the short time I've been on here, vocab level was good in about the first half and it dropped off a little after that but was still ok. You did good with the transition line. Saw a few lines that I think could use a little adjustment:
"Like a petrified, frozen synical hectic mind"
rhymes a little better if you just pluralize it to:
"Like petrified, frozen, cynical, hectic minds"
and
"Cause according to you ELEETE's flow was always irrelevant"
I think is better as:
"Cause according to you ELEETE's flow was pure irrelevance"
Nice piece however - I liked - as said you transmitted your emotion(s) well.

Dev
I liked your awareness - it seemed to be from a third person view. Nice wordplay within - not really wordplay but you flipped ideas nicely. While Eleete's piece comes right for you - yours seemed to kinda sneak around the back door but in the end was just as effective. I liked the closer - although truthfully it didn't really seem a closer - it was more of a beginning.
"1 in 10 …yes… are blinded by the lyrical drain"
Got'ta say that's a conservative figure. Nice work both of you.

most rhymes in the open mic room ain't worth reading but this was.....you got nice lines and they are relevent to each other which I find hard to do but you did it...stay up nigga you gone be nice soon