Lyric v. OutCome (Drop Links)

Damn last up already...drop an honest vote and a link

Both need to step it up with the punches...

I see soft shit that could be KO material...

Allow me to 'for instance'...

Outcome's shit...
drawing tupac porno, beliving they were soul mates
begging to be grand fisherman tryna master-bate

Very blah wordplay makes for a weak as hell and pretty stupid sounding punch.
Now...my way...

Obsessed with Shakur, sad sketches replace a soulmate...
Cuz even with Mak around......Lyric ain't gettin no dates.

See how I used your idea of focusing on his avy (which was gay to remove, you shoulda put it back to aknowledge this battle, Lyric)...
But I incorporated some dope wordplay about him being lonely and missing Pac...
Also implies that he was fuckin Pac and ain't dated since he died...
The wordplay also works his name, Lyrics are still coming around even though Pac is dead, they come through Makavelli, but we get no concert dates...cuz...well, Pac's fuckin dead.

Not gonna say anything tutorial to Lyric.

I can see he knows wordplay and punching with his opener and his "comeout/closet" line...

Just work on sustaining your attack...

After those two bars, you stopped trying and just talked down to the guy.

No wordplay till the last line, and that was kinda predictable.

Lyric, for reasons above...

Peace

ok here we go....
this was completly one sided...

Lyric-good punches few played, not really
need to use anything good against him
since his verse wus whack as shit...
good personals meta4s were decent
good flow/structure n wordplay

OutCome-you got merked...stop used played
ass lines, and the masterbate wus your best
and it is so played..the ICP line wusnt good at all...
ok wording n metas but work on personals and
un-played punches...

My V/Lyric...both return HONEST votes on my battle wit Diverse in Sig...
lyric-you alryd voted on that amke sure you drop honestly on my elevated topical
against rule...you to outcome..

Outcome:
Lyrics you make half the bars look gay just by posting
came to me for help,lemmie know when to start ghosting
Ok , not a hard hit, not really good enuf to open with
drawing tupac porno, beliving they were soul mates
begging to be grand fisherman tryna master-bate
skills fake cause talents somthing you never create
really played and didn't really fit, kinda weird structure here
insane joker league? at least we know your on ICP's dick
fake DJ ina crappy crew - sigs the only time you spin shit
Aight personal
Dun worrie no one will fuck with you i promise cat
were homophobic and of afraid of wackness ontopa that
lookin up at me callin you braids the way ya head falls back
nah, not feelin as a close

Lyric:
This kid is like cyphers...many whackass styles rolled into one
Cause when he spits...
...OutCome's played rhymes and weak punches son
personal, but kinda weak
Your crew names contradictory...cause I ghostwrite for you all
The members are unknown...
...So ComeOut of the closet now
aight play
Coming at me with whack cyphers,trying to diss my crew now
Doing played clown jokes...
...Your whole verse is played out
fill
Shit kid I'll embarass you so bad you'll run away to Cprogress' site bitch
So you can rap...
...Against more whack newbies that are better than your shit
ok
Your sig says you the rare one..Yeah I can see that cause your whack
And your the only one that can say...lyrics literally merked my ass
that is a diss to you. He's the only one uve merked?

Aight battle, both sides need to pick up some creativity.

Outcome, youve gotta use some betta word play and direct ur hits. Also, ur bars are really awkward, cuz some of them are 2 lines, some are 3. Maybe you meant to, but I couldn't grasp it.

Lyric, you tried some wordplay on outcome, but it was not that creative. Try thinkin harder when keyin. Also, try to get some more complex rhymes in there, this bar didnt even rhyme:
"Your crew names contradictory...cause I ghostwrite for you all
The members are unknown...
...So ComeOut of the closet now"
Jus watch out for shit like that.

No hate, but Lyric's punches were a lil harder, so Ima give it to him.

Vote - Lyric

( PS - I aint votin fo him cuz Out voted against me in the $pit battle...I don't care to win that battle anyways... )

Outcome

Lyrics you make half the bars look gay just by posting
came to me for help,lemmie know when to start ghosting
Not a bad opener. I can't really say much about it other than it was aight.
drawing tupac porno, beliving they were soul mates
begging to be grand fisherman tryna master-bate
This was a decent line, although the punch was really played out. I've heard the "masterbate" punch like 1000 times. But not bad.
skills fake cause talents somthing you never create
insane joker league? at least we know your on ICP's dick
Not bad man, the second line was nice.
fake DJ ina crapy crew - sigs the only time you spin shit
Good transition from the last line to this one. Pretty good punch too.
Dun worrie no one will fuck with you i promise cat
were homophobic and of afraid of wackness ontopa that
lookin up at me callin you braids the way ya head falls back
Decent closing lines. Nothing too special, second line played but third line nice.

Lyric

This kid is like cyphers...many whackass styles rolled into one
Cause when he spits...
...OutCome's played rhymes and weak punches son
Aight not bad opener.
Your crew names contradictory...cause I ghostwrite for you all
The members are unknown...
...So ComeOut of the closet now
Decent but played.
...Your whole verse is played out
Shit kid I'll embarass you so bad you'll run away to Cprogress' site bitch
So you can rap...
Not bad at all, good transition into the next line
...Against more whack newbies that are better than your shit
Your sig says you the rare one..Yeah I can see that cause your whack
And your the only one that can say...lyrics literally merked my ass
Not a bad closer but a little played.

In conclusion i'm gonna give this one to Lyric. His verse flowed a little better and had some better punches. Both could have came stronger tho.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115279

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