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aight i think that lyric got thsi with more consistant punches and better wordplay and vocab
also the flow was better and the structure was way better
oakley came with elementary shit and lyric came nice
his punches were more direct and hit way harder
v/lyric
hit up the battle in my sig...need one more
Vote gone.
-Axe
Wow with all my respect & stuff..this was pretty weak..
Anyways, on with the breakdowns..
Oakley
Frame was good, content a little less.
Simplistic..some ok (attempts at times) at personals..
Fairly decent punches..nothin outstandin'.
I dont know who you are really..
So yea if ur droppin' quick & half assed..show more effort..
& if this was just a regular battle verse for you,
Elevate.. add complexity in form of wordplay etc..
Wasnt to bad..like i said some ok punches but it lacked creativity.
lyric
I didnt really like your verse...very..well..FL-ish..
You where just statin' facts or concludin' things,
Nothin really punchin you opponent..also no signs of wordplay etc..whatsoever..
You definately need to focus on your punches more,
& just need to leave out irrelevant shit.
No to good..but no to bad either..pretty mediocre..at best,
Though.. Ok.
vote Oak - for better punches basically..
Oak
This kid's a moron, and I'm being modest...
His avi's his idea of portraying an artist/1
nice opening.. the personal was good... 7/10
seriously, he sit's an votes like he's hardcore..
but goes to the WEC for punches n metiphores?../2
lmao.. true shit, alot people act tough when they vote but then ask for all this help on wack shit... 8.5/10
Why not elevated? Oh wait, that's right you'd get beat..
You aint got enuff Arson'ill to be say your Elite/3(sig)
wordplay was good.. i like it.. 6/10
Even Hottie said it, IJL? ya'll aren't respected...
Don't you understand, your prone to clownish efforts/4
not really feelin the rhyme... but it was a good punch .. 5/10
An what's up wit your title sayin "don't fuck with me"?
Please...
Your only talents hiding underrated's anal beads/5
lol.. nice closing.. 8.5/10
Overall - 35/50
Lyric
Oak spoke too soon,Now he's in Doub jeopardy and screwed
Q: This is a herbbish move...
...A: What is Oakley callin out the IJL crew
lol.. u just called ya crew herbs basically...wack opening.. 0/10
You said you'd 5-0 both me and UnderRated...bitch
Now this kats got ya tongue...
...Cause vets conclude...your drop aint shit
worded horribly, rhyme was plain wit bitch and shit..not feelin it.. 2/10
You come with weak punches played rhymes, you at ya peak
And do all of RB a favor...
...Please don't look before you leap
little bit played... but decent... 5/10
You aint got nothin ta back ya shit up, jus anutha newb who acts hard
Jus a wannabe MC from Maryland got as much respect as ya avatar (none)
nice punch.. good personal... but ya coulda made it better by ya wording, but 8/10
PMin me like mad ... sayin I'm no vet and you'll KO me dude
Not even the Oaks in ya sig will protect from my 'sonning' you
decent closer.. 5/10
overall - 20/50
my vote - Oak..he came harder wit his punches and had more wordplay
Battle re-opened at lyric's request due to bad votes.
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Originally Posted by Straight Ace
He explained it well
VOTE: Oak.
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vote honest i can't poll vote.
Oakley- ur rhymes were barely rhymes at all and neither were ur punches. you seemed to just hit him with as much personals as you could find. but wuts a personal without a punch to carry it? exactly. your flow was ok, ur structure was off, and ur vocab was decent. not too bad. 6.5/10
Lyric- came with sum nice punches. the only thing i disliked was ur structure. you had sum good personals, and ur flow wasn't bad either. i enjoyed the small creativity with the little play on jeopardy line. nice job. you took this with all but ur structure. 8.5/10
vote- Lyric
hit this up if you have the time:
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112882
'Urban Reelist vs Me'
pz
Overall: *LYRIC* I felt both of your verses were pretty dope, but I’ve seen both of you throw out some better punches and such, but I’m thinking you guys were just comin’ out swingin and played some of them. Props to both of you, but I just felt Lyric takes this one because he was very creative to my liking.
Flow/Structure: *Tie* I like both of your structure and your flow, Lyric closed off pretty good, and Oakley came out swinging.
Personals: *Oakley* I think Oakley takes because he went at Lyric. Used everything he could to use it against him. Great personals.
Punches: *Lyric* I think you BOTH came out with pretty dope punches, I liked both of your punches, but I personally felt that lyric came out harder and it felt more direct to me at least. They need to hit harder from both of you, I know you BOTH can make them hit harder.
This kid's a moron, and I'm being modest...
His avi's his idea of portraying an artist/1....6/10
seriously, he sit's an votes like he's hardcore..
but goes to the WEC for punches n metiphores?../2...7
Why not elevated? Oh wait, that's right you'd get beat..
You aint got enuff Arson'ill to be say your Elite/3(sig)
Good personal 5/10
Even Hottie said it, IJL? ya'll aren't respected...
Don't you understand, your prone to clownish efforts/4...3/10
An what's up wit your title sayin "don't fuck with me"?
Please...
Your only talents hiding underrated's anal beads/5...3/10
overall:24/50
Oak spoke too soon,Now he's in Doub jeopardy and screwed
Q: This is a herbbish move...
...A: What is Oakley callin out the IJL crew7/10
You said you'd 5-0 both me and UnderRated...bitch
Now this kats got ya tongue...
...Cause vets conclude...your drop aint shit
Okie..i think 5-0 should'a maybe said merked or something...5/10
You come with weak punches played rhymes, you at ya peak
And do all of RB a favor...
...Please don't look before you leap
Okie line:5/10
You aint got nothin ta back ya shit up, jus anutha newb who acts hard
Jus a wannabe MC from Maryland got as much respect as ya avatar (none)
Stated off okie but ended shitty 4/10
PMin me like mad ... sayin I'm no vet and you'll KO me dude
Not even the Oaks in ya sig will protect from my 'sonning' you
Good closer I liked the name play...6/10
Over all:27/50
my vote goes to lyric...shit was close but i felt his shit more....
drop an honest vote and shit on the shit in my sig and this one...and if you voted already make sure you poll vote and shit
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117954
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oakley =
This kid's a moron, and I'm being modest...
His avi's his idea of portraying an artist/1
umm didnt hit very hard
seriously, he sit's an votes like he's hardcore..
but goes to the WEC for punches n metiphores?../2
na, still didnt hit hard
Why not elevated? Oh wait, that's right you'd get beat..
You aint got enuff Arson'ill to be say your Elite/3(sig)
didnt like this personal!!!
Even Hottie said it, IJL? ya'll aren't respected...
Don't you understand, your prone to clownish efforts/4
what. was this a diss???
An what's up wit your title sayin "don't fuck with me"?
Please...
Your only talents hiding underrated's anal beads
only good line of the battle
lyric =
Oak spoke too soon,Now he's in Doub jeopardy and screwed
Q: This is a herbbish move...
...A: What is Oakley callin out the IJL crew
na, didnt like this
You said you'd 5-0 both me and UnderRated...bitch
Now this kats got ya tongue...
...Cause vets conclude...your drop aint shit
ummm no either!!! no real punch
You come with weak punches played rhymes, you at ya peak
And do all of RB a favor...
...Please don't look before you leap
lol, ok
You aint got nothin ta back ya shit up, jus anutha newb who acts hard
Jus a wannabe MC from Maryland got as much respect as ya avatar (none)
lol again!!!!
PMin me like mad ... sayin I'm no vet and you'll KO me dude
Not even the Oaks in ya sig will protect from my 'sonning' you
best line of both spits nice
ok, not the greatest battle,
oakley = ya flow and structue was spot on, but same about ya punches none really hit, ya best line was ya finish!!! vocab also shit!!
lyric = started off shit man, but came better in the end, flow was good and also structure!! punches hit harder the oak all the way thru, vocab was ok, and ya threw in some ok personals!!
vote = lyric -expected better from lyric but he still wins with better and wittier punches. eg. the last line of his spit. oakley ya need to word on ya punches as none hit hard!!!
pz
why is the poll closed, did i just waste my time on that????^^^ mods sort this out please :-)