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MaNdiBUS it might be hard to diss you bcus i only no your name,
nah i chew up emcees like you thats how i got my fame,
lacking straigh punchs. self boasting really. ok attemp, thought you were going some where with the follow through.
yup look in my sig thats whos to blame,
my punches are like your face gaurantying people pain,
could have been better dun. follow through was a weak punch but hey at least it was a punch yea mean? metaphor could have been better.
dnt question my potential im a burning falme./
This is just another Win on my battle record,
flow came off.. sorry kidd-o i give bar by bar break downs.. 2lines-1bar.. no punch or metaphor here.. self boasting aka filler type ish
damn my second punch and your already floored./
im sure im rite in think this is your first battle thread,
eh, weak.. the follow through could have been alot stronger with your punch. could have used a dope metaphor
so ima end your career quick with infa-red to your head,
aiight time to say goodnight with my last bullet to your head./
there are no bullets... the gangsta imagine isnt working for you sorry cat.. Not enough to really pull it off. But hey Jayz could either right?
Over all you need to work on your direction of your punchs.. making sure they go to dissing your opponent. Slowly work up strength through practice. After that work on your metaphors, and then after you have metaphors down try to get you wordplay and rhyme scheme up.. Accually rhyme scheme comes before metaphors. so yea...
That was trash god and ya style is shit,
u couldnt beat ManDibus if it was tatooed to ya dick//
basic and very much a played subject here...badly played.. but i guess its decent
my flows are ill, punchlines ridiculous,
I spit so sick niggaz like u catch syphillis//
again played. you really need some new content for you verse, sickness,cum lines, ish that you can think of in a minute is prolly play.. steer clear from it
lyically ,metaphorically you not ready,
cut u open like a blunt, disconnect you air tubes wit a machete//
accually ive heard blunt lines before,.. but there not THAT play.. this bar lacks strength though
ManDibus is nice, Punchline precise,
you claming u can eat me when u cant count barz right//
follow through is ok i guess.. but you need more strength in your bars yea mean? and your set could have been a lot better/
I spit nutrients to soul let it seap through,
your nowhere near me, 2/3 of ya wins were by dq//
eh alright punch i suppose.. but the set could have been more of a build up and the follow through could have had a better hit to it.
now do u really wanna battle,
I'll crack open ya adams apple and drink the juices like snapple//
this is an ok concept.. but i remember somthing like it from back in the day. haventheard much of it around here though so its ok. the punch isnt much though
looke i aint even comin at u 4real,
lyricall you'll get killed, none can compare to mandibus neva have and neva will.................//
self boasting, i can compair, you would get merked... this ending could have been alot better
over all you needed to workon your punchs strength. your metaphors were pretty much all play and needed to have some fresh ideas. rhyme scheme could be tweaked a little bit.
Vote -ManDIbus
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^^^^^^^^^^^whateva
it amazes me at times.........
anywayz uppin
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Rascal:
MaNdiBUS it might be hard to diss you bcus i only no your name,
nah i chew up emcees like you thats how i got my fame,
boastin, aight for tha open
yup look in my sig thats whos to blame,
my punches are like your face gaurantying people pain,
dnt question my potential im a burning falme./
I suggest you dont bring up ur past wins...mostly dqed
This is just another Win on my battle record,
damn my second punch and your already floored./
aight, that works
im sure im rite in thinkin this is your first battle thread,
so ima end your career quick with infa-red to your head,
aiight time to say goodnight with my last bullet to your head./
Nice close
Mandibus:
That was trash god and ya style is shit,
u couldnt beat ManDibus if it was tatooed to ya dick//
That is no punch
my flows are ill, punchlines ridiculous,
I spit so sick niggaz like u catch syphillis//
sickness thing played
lyically ,metaphorically you not ready,
cut u open like a blunt, disconnect you air tubes wit a machete//
ok, i dunno
ManDibus is nice, Punchline precise,
you claming u can eat me when u cant count barz right//
weak punch
I spit nutrients to soul let it seap through,
your nowhere near me, 2/3 of ya wins were by dq//
finally a personal, shoulda bin a lot better tho
now do u really wanna battle,
I'll crack open ya adams apple and drink the juices like snapple//
kinda weird
looke i aint even comin at u 4real,
lyricall you'll get killed, none can compare to mandibus neva have and neva will.................//
self boastin aint gunna help.
Both sides need to be more creative...there was no creativity in the whole verse on both sides. Mandibus, your flow was weak, that is what you gotta work on. And through some intelligence in there as well.
Rascal, your shit was not much better. I've seen u do betta, this was close ta horrible. Both need some personals, they make tha battle.
Vote - Rascal
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this battle was kinda weak so imma not vote on it but i tink mandibus takes it
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my vote goes to mandibus on this one. Rascal had a pretty nice verse structure wise but besides that he didnt really have any amazing lines. his punches were too simple)same, name, lame). he didnt have any good metas either it seemed more like a whole verse of filler.anyways mandibus got em out the gate with his opener. he didn't keep it as simple and his metas were pretty good. the // things kinda throw off ya flow and your structure was off so that didn't help much either but what ya lacked in ya made up for in punches. my vote goes to mandibus
VOTE_MANDIBUS
open battle in sig
Rascal you gave an opinion but didnt poll vote on my battle with junio so go do that plz.
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This was MADDD NICE.... but it was kinda one sided in my mind... both came SICK.. yep... i was feelin both verse's... Mandibus ... kid just came with some ill lines... Rascal you cam hella coo too.... but the dunny boi just overpowered it just a tad bit son... keep comin at it
vote - Mandibus
Caesar - On3
