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very dope piece. kinda loss the flow and structure towards the end but it didn't
have too bad of an effect on the piece. it was no doubt a great read. especially
how it was based on a true story. it was heartfelt and well written. the flip
at the end made it all the more better. very good use of repetition.
keep at it man.
hit this up in return plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113569
pz
Wat the fuck was that about,,,,you all seemed to like it but what was it a rap???
It read like an wilfred owen peom,,but not about the war!!!
If I told you you have a nice body, would you hold it against me???
this was fantastic Baxter...your flow was flawless, your scheme was interesting, and don't even get me started on the content. This was almost as dope as they come. Pretty damn close. Pardon me while I cum in my pants.
I especially liked the part where he died :rolleyes:
You creamed after he died huh? : ) Thanks Maven, it means alot to me to be praised in such fashion by someone of your stature.
^;kjhik
is that...dezyir back from the dead?!
Indeed.
yeehaa
<--small penis.
this had a ring to it. The structure and flow was origional...but it worked well. I think i've read this before actually..the title seems familiar..have you posted it up a while ago? anyway, vocab and emotion was good...and the last line was a definate hit.
respect.
hey dats was good compared to what i been
seeing on dis site.
you got flow