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WL - I Liked you verse, it was very easy to read. I got a full understanding of what you were saying, and all of that. It had good vocab, figuring the line length and all of that. Maybe leangthin the lines, but it wasnt a problem. It was just a sweet little verse, and I liked how you handled the topic... But Ive seen better from you, LOL...
Keep doing your thing hommie...
Double-0-Seven - You also had a nice litte verse. I wasnt feeling the opener though, just didnt attract me to the verse that much. It had good vocab, figuring it was a small write. The structure was fine, you had some good lines in there. I didnt like the way you took the topic though. I was hoping you wouldnt stray to far from it, but you did. No hate, thats just my Opinion... It was a good verse, figuring you wrote it in a short amount of time... Ive also seen better from you... G/L hommie
Vote - White Lightning
Conclusion - I thought he wrote better on the topic than 007 did. Other than that it was evenly matched. Good work from both, this was hard to judge. G/L once again...
Be sure to return the favor and make an honest vote on the battle in my sig. That would be much appriciated, thanks...
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V/ WL, Betterwriters voice, good story line, good vocab & flow..
Double O .. was a good try, some ok lines, .. but Wl just wrote better on the topic, than you did, .. very nice... to bad ur slipped .. u could have evaluated here to become a better writer.. keep it up..
Wl takes this.
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im not slipped, i won the other half of slips.
uppin
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Winner= White Lightning
007- You Had A Verse Nice Verse For Something That Was Rushed. You Had Nice Flow, I Was Feelin What YOu Hadda Say About THe Topic. Your Structure Was Nice, But You Lacked Vocab. 7.5/10
WL- Very Nice Piece, I Was Feelin This The Whole Way Through. You Had Really Good Flow, And You Were Really Descriptive About The Topic. Your Vocab Was There, And You Stayed On Topic. You Had Nice Structure Too. 8/10
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