thanx man, f'real
keep em comin
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thanx man, f'real
keep em comin
it was a dope read , havent read sh^t like this in a while , i really like the begining and ending , something truthful ,depicting,graphic , and dope to , only thing i couldnt understand was:
slaughter towards the masses...broken glasses on the sun...
i dont get the broken glass thing , i slow what did you mean ,
anywayz props for this , :)
yah that line, its all symbology, it oges with how i been put down by many people, and the only thing to really affect me is my family, the glasses on the sun represents how if you look hard in reality, you will be burned by thr truth that occurs when you look deep into reality, and slauhter to the masses, is the people ive beaten in battles
its all symbology man, read inbetween th lines if you can, thanx for the feedback defiately, is there anything else ome1 doent really get that i can explain
well you set out looking for imagery and you got it... props for that, i like a verse that builds up a picture, it brings more interest to it, i think... it was also quite smooth with the flow and transitions, there was one spot where it seemed a bit forced, other than that nice read here....
... hit my latest called, klowledge.... plz
thanx man, i definatrely will, peace
wow nice.............................................. .........ur definately elevating...other than that....change some stuff...and ull be there
thankyou, uppin
lmao, that's like all of my battles in front lines. Three battles and have yet to have gotten a single vote for either side.Quote:
Originally Posted by Lingwistik
Yeah, your imagery usage was great though, and I love imagery. So, my opinion is that this was great, lol. I've got a simple thought process man.
haha, iight,m leave your links
I'm gonna go ahead and warn you, we're noobs man. lol
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=135089
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=135052
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=134716
That last one was rough... Just rough, lol. Neither of us were ay good. And remember, keep it straight.
yah i will, ill only leave feedback in one tho, iight, peace
yo dis was dope...
real nice vocab...
flow was ok...
real good job with the imagery...that was the stand out, of projecting images into our head...that what brought most attention to it...
keep elevating cuz soon you will be better then this...
Dope drop keep doin ya thing...this was real dope...
hey man i was really really feelin this peice i think it was alot better then most of these peeps thought it was...your structure was fuckin great man, and your flow was awesome almost all your lines were evenly matched....imagery was great man completely outstandin...keepp us topics like this
thanx people, no doubt apprecaite it
yo uppin on this, seein if i can get any more juice from the squeeze
uppin