homie, im sittin here shakin, and sweatin just thinkin
homie IM FUCKIN WITH YOU, get off that drinkin
why wouldnt i wanna fuck with you? cuz id' chew you up, spit you out, and bury ya 6-feet?
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homie, im sittin here shakin, and sweatin just thinkin
homie IM FUCKIN WITH YOU, get off that drinkin
why wouldnt i wanna fuck with you? cuz id' chew you up, spit you out, and bury ya 6-feet?
you faggot, quit jacking off to me in your room at your moms trailer park...
breez believes hes jesus, some1 took his ego to feed it
please, he needs to take his skill and increase it
even though every rap it seems to be decreasin
everytime i post ur rap career keeps depletin
NEWBS DIDNT EVEN READ DA RULES...go and fucc up another cypher
malikia, sounds like a bootleg nokia...lower reception
desk cuz u way below the boss, jus die..b4 u left kin(kids)
ur nun fag, completely 0 is ur flow and hits, u want feed>?
i shud really feed you...get on your knees, succ dese N.U.T.Z'z
please, u dun deserve the greatness, so feel blessed
cuz ill place u in the graveyard, like all of the rest
go ahead and test me, ill murk ya worse than karl
ur like a parrot...squirl, im tired...ur wacc...malled
n/t: the love train
bitches love the cock cause im quickly back on the rebound
catz clowned cause im getting and smashing pussy underground
this shit here must of been a gift from them angels above
we dont ride on tracks this vehicle moves on love
rubbing the chicks breast while another bitch giving me brain
dont hate me, this just the actions that happend in the love train
next topic=thoughts of a criminal
ppl ask sum fuckin Questions about being a crminal
y'all fink is through da music as send ms through a terminal
but ya mucthufuckas are rite
i fink like a criminal as its in me sight
everminute its on my mind that
guns are answer 2 my problems
if u dont like dis shit
but truth is shit happens
wherever u go in life
and guns help me 2 sort me ed
next topic on girls
i love girls in all shapes and sizes
like to wait and see what they look like naked .....
..................want it to be full of suprises
bitches love the swag cause i make there toes curl
damn i must be some kind of perv son.....
..............cause i even love the scent of a girl
aint nothing better than watching a girl in a bikini
.......................might be a dream cuz
...........damn im wishing she could be here wit me
love girls , especially those with big breast
........nice flat stomach
......looks like she got two watermelons on her chest
blonde hair and a fat ass so i can grab it while we walk
.............i seen this girl so stoped and thought
damn let me use this tic-tac cause i dont want my breathe kicking when we talk
love to see chicks happy,hate to see thme crying
...thats when i step in
....and tell them every tear u shed gets me closer to dyining
and that puts a smile on her face which made my day
...cause putting a smile on her face
.....made her ask me out on a date
as you can see i love women, feet, hands thighs and stomach and back
......i cant never say enough about them
but i will say this, i love them more when they love me back
next topic=nothing to eat
^heh, that was nice, that last bit was almost like fucking poetry :P, great lengths, but try using a different opener, or try an opener, write the verse, then go back and revise it all, might give you an idea
i'm broke down, livin on these streets with rats
5 blocks across from tha screamin gats
got evicted after my ex broke in and tore up the house
she didnt give a chance for: "lets go take back what's ours"
and now my lunch is what i find in the bin - or the street on a good day
not sure if god hates me, but at night, i still pray
i look at everyone that walks past, with a torn hat hoping for money
they think im faking, they stare at me, laugh, how can this be funny!
i might aswell suicide, no-one ever gives a fuck
not even my family, didnt lend me a single fucking buck
fuck it, i cant take this life, its like a vacumm, and i'm stuck
i say my last prayers, jump, and see my last lights, of a truck....
Next Topic: Backstabbing Friends
yo the track ya verse was decent...i vision everything u spoke. da shit was deep fa real. keep it up
yo i cant even depend on my friends its ridiculous
how i share my pain and they think it aint serious
sayin i got issues but really they dont intend to hold they hand out
but wen they hurtin i gave them my shoulder n ears to hand out
hoods is fucked up nowadays they dont give a fuck how u livin
rats n roaches, dogs n cats got more stickin together than us humans
so i look up at the sky askin god to forgive me
on all the wrong doings, grandma i kno my mouth too filthy
but u left me here in this world, now im gettin fucked up mentally
so i just really on me, myself, and i like beyonce though it aint easy
they bad mouthin thinkin i aint on to they game tho
but i fell for they gimics way even tho lies i felt it yo
next topic- last day to live
^^I actually kinda liked that. coulda put a specific story to it, but it was still pretty good. it all seems like a bunch of independent bars slapped together. try to make a more clear continuity to it.
diseased and uncurable, i feel my condition aint right
but my last hours on earth feel like the first of my life
i feel free to walk the streets and do what I please
I'm not begging, pleading, or in a church on my knees
I'm going places in this town, meeting people I never seen
with a smile more infectious than my cancerous genes
its like a dream, with this impending death, its suprising i can stand it
but I'm using my time wisely, even with the fate I'm handed
I'm not stranded, or alone, no, now I'm with the friends I love
they're hovering over me as I'm being pulled from above
and there's Claire, my true best friend, the only woman I adore
wanted to marry, learned my condition, and couldn't hurt her more
so I hid my feelings, because it would only make things harder
and as I'm passing I can see it, I'm her childrens' father
and we're out on the marina, as the bay reflects the sunset
then I open my eyes and wonder if my death is done yet
I stop breathing, no movement, and cold to no suprise
but I can still see them all as they break down and cry
except Claire, she stands there, and I want to tell the truth
but she leans over and whispers softly "I love you, too"
with the comfort of the words echoing in my head, I die
it's sad, but I couldn't ask for a happier goodbye
hope you guys get the fact that the first part was a dream...
new topic - about my job
uppin for feedback, crack hoes
yea i can def feel that i like how u used ur real life in it to connect on an emotional level..
with this job of mine, oh God im fine
got time to rhyme n shine while droppin dimes
dont just witness me come do the business g
and ur wrist'll gleam like mister clean, see?
life as a salesman has never come easy
im hustla, move more snow, man, than young jeezy
next topic: gettin robbed
real life? uhhhhhh ive never died before.Quote:
Originally Posted by Blue Hat
well obviously and the topic was ur "last day" but u put in ur girl, and a marina and the bay, which im assuming r places u like to chill at, i dont know y else u would have mentioned em
its a metaphore, there's a lot of wordplay in this. i think i might turn this into an OM