Elevation Thread.

I hear sirens blarin the po po at my back/
In a rush I see paper fallin out my sack/
Man this is whack, my homies left me out to dry/
If I get outta this you best know my 9 gonna leave em out to die/
This is all mine, was gonna split the loot/
But yall niggas betrayed me gave the boot/
I turn down an alley, po po screamin slow down/
Bitch you cant make me brake, this is my town/
End up puttin me in handcuffs readin my rights/
But you know like Riley from Boondocks Im bout to put up a fight/

nt=dream girl

^^^nice drop yo
but the second bar was kinda ultra stretched

the chick wit da perfect hips, a big chest
wit a smooth ass n is queen type at best
a mix between black n spanish, she make my draws dampen
nice eyes, long hair, damn she got a brotha stamp'n
for better details, u need to be in side my mind
cuz how beautiful she looks yo dunn i cant jus define , she kind
a nice attitude, her moves never practical
her presence is attractive duke, wit a scent das galactical
das my future wifey, got her neck full of gleamed pearls
but its jus a fantasy after all its jus DREAM GIRL

N~T: world wide issues

^^^ to the last couple of drop YALL ARE FUCKING DUMB..FOLLOW THE DIRECTIONS..LEAVE FEEDBACK ON THE VERSE ABOVE YOU AND THEN LEAVE A TOPIC AFTER YOUR DONE.. YOU CAN GET BANNED FOR NOT FOLLOWING THE RULES..DDUUHH



SORRY FOR THE FREEPOST BUT IT WAS GETTING ME PISSED

absodin : i like that lil verse, wit the right beat and the right flow niceee.... i like how you were descriptive, but insecure to talk about wat you really saw as in you couldn't explain it, but you knew exactly bout the girl , then came back wit it at the end just being a "dream girl".

NXT: Relationships

The only thing running in my head is my ex-girlfriend
I want the truth, not a bitch, not a sniff, fuck a friend
to forget about her is to make believe she's dead
Block out the lies, the manipulation I'm a start a trend
For all ya'll homies caught up in that real, but so-called love
No more shedding tears for that one so-called dove
Do yo thing, find yo fling, everything's not the same thing
Take it easy for a while, stay low key like a murder trial
Take your time, your young, your in your prime, get ya mind right
No reason for thoughts of wedding chimes and baby cries
One day you'll find that somebody that'll bring back your heart
But you gotta forgive and forget the one that ripped it apart
It's not worth holding the grudge, it's worth holding yourself back
From those feelilngs taking you back to the one that got you off track
I've already had that infatuated experience with amistad
But following it negatively was my only maldad
Getting out of it is my way of salvarme de mujeres sin cantidad

cypher is gay

Dakman you to young to understand whats goiing on//
u a bitch here to freeport..cuz u dun got u flowing on//
cant tell shit about ya so ima jus change the topic//
u a wack bitch barly teen..u not even a hot kid//
i cant say to much about a anonymous bitch so drop it//
if u post another peaice of shit the mods gunna have to block it//

N/T: freeposting

niggas on this forum be free postin/
when reading the rules quit coastin/
thats why this wannabe dakman kid/
got his little ass roasted and toasted/
posting only clutters up the cypher/
this is the elevation thread so we can get higher/
and dakman said cypher was gay/
cause he couldnt of noting to say/
and this to all y'all niggas who do this shit/
all it means is that you a worthless bitch/

next:fake gangsta rappers or 50 cent

i like how you dissed dakman in fact im the same when i drop
you could say that you cocked a glock and let it pop
what im sayin is that if it was a battle you would win


niggas on this forum be free postin/
when reading the rules quit coastin/
thats why this wannabe dakman kid/
got his little ass roasted and toasted/
posting only clutters up the cypher/
this is the elevation thread so we can get higher/
and dakman said cypher was gay/
cause he couldnt think of noting to say/
and this to all y'all niggas who do this shit/
all it means is that you a worthless bitch/

next:fake gangsta rappers or 50 cent

neither really interest my ears id rather hear
the careers of rappers who dont batter fear
we climb the ladder and leave the bottom matter
ill words hit the wire we call it a problem chatter
autumns shattered when they got em splatterd
no doubt son we all know that the gat hurts
shits all backwards like criss cross twist that shirt

nt./ riding the 9 train

^^ was aight... nice multi.....nice wordplay

ridin the nine train.. dont know what it is
goin to my gurl house to pick up my kids
should'a wore a jimmy hat, wellshoulda, woulda, could'a
i rode to long, now im stuck in a unfamiliar hood-a
got my street legs now back on track
walk in to my homie on my gurl, laying flat on her back

n/t cheatin on somebody

^^^ some times ya shouldnt drop on topics ya dont know about but....
Ya had no rhyme scheem but ya had some good transitions. Ya need to elivate work
on ya flow over all normal flow. Keep ya head up....

Cheatin and creapin on my girl while shes sleepin.
Im out eatin with this trick while my grils weeping.
My beeper keeps beepin i know that shes peepin.
I promised i would allways have her safekeeping.
Trust is gone i'v broken my vowes and what now.
Dint think of what woud havpen if she found out.
Never would have guessed life would go this way.
Wont forgive me now but tomarrow's a new day.


N/t : Some one in ya Fam died...

Has potential, but I think you rushed it though. Nice structure, but work on wording and vocab. Was an alright drop, but like i said it seems forced and rushed just to get to the point

My pen leaks slowly filling every line w/ agony and pain
And the sky gets dark as my tears drops like falling rain
It hard to lose one, but its like an Angel lookin at angles
Pointin out the knots in your life as its hard to untangle
Empty promises and broken dreams, shatters lost hopes
N now your life's on the edge, everythings hard to cope
The only thing left to do is to stay strong and look pass
Cuz u only live once & you dont want to live in the past

Next topic: Future

Good structure great flow in gerneral complex and diverce.
And finaly a topic I can work with.

Your future disipates into an end that some consider fate.
Dont hesitate take your goals and find a life you can make.
No one can tell you whats to come untill its said and done.
Make the most out of your life keep ya self off of the run.
Insperation and innovation left for the future gerneration.
The seperation of the world form the people and its nation.
So easy to say that you got conpleate controle of your life.
As bad as things are going now well I hope your damn right.

N/t Lesson learned...

really good flow, except for one line that was sliiightly off, and the vocab is nice. just work on spelling a little, but that doesn't matter in audio ;)

broken hearts, wondering what's the lesson learned
is the girl a bless or curse, is "never met" much worse?
perhaps it was about treating her decent, but that ain't the case
holy ground underneath her, but just recent i got slapped in the face
maybe she's the crazy one, not realizing i love her
i didn't just want to fuck her, no one else was above her
another thing, i guess this means i know the meaning of it
yo, hoes are hoes, no hope in those, and what i'm feeling, fuck it

not exactly what you had in mind, but oh well, lol... i'm tired too... going to bed... good night/ morning people

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