Snipin' Mothafuckers Now

Ayo,
Dialated eyes, blood shot shit, you'll never find
You tape my battles, so u can copy,play, pause, and rewind
I'm behind, sometimes, I juss cut the shit off, press pause
Then I hit a soft, rotation, and realize I really have no cause
Laws, and my balls, twist my words, till there against a wall
Have Your girl saying fuck u, i want Se7eN, atleast his dick ain't small
Shit You realize I never crawl, think, sink into a mental state
God had you emotionally laid, into a fucked up physical trait
Ok, so Freestylin' off a beat or juss going str8 ocapella
But My words ain't flyin' ,they sorin', juss like disses on roc-a-fella
So knock a fella, sock a fella, make his ryhmes run off course

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But this was ok i thought...structure in this i thought was alright, could be touched up a bit maybe...could have added some multies to this to help it out though...flow was ok, it got off in some parts though...vocab in this was alright, could be up'd though...but keep at it.

ya solid part was the structure.....
rhymes werent to clever....
but i guess you came hard with the whole attitude/self glorification thing.

nice work!

pretty good....u had kinda a pointless topic.....showed aggression though....decent structure....pretty good vocab...and an overall nice flow....here is ur best line in my opinion...

Quote:

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From Se7eN:
Shit You realize I never crawl, think, sink into a mental state
God had you emotionally laid, into a fucked up physical trait
Ok, so Freestylin' off a beat or juss going str8 ocapella
But My words ain't flyin' ,they sorin', juss like disses on roc-a-fella

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^^that was pretty straight...u rhymed the most here...and u had a few multis here and there in this part...and roc-a-fella line was coo

BREAKDOWN
Emotion - Very Good (alot of attempted aggression)
Multis - Good
Structure - Very Good
Vocab - Good
Flow - Very Good
Creativity - Good
Consistency - Very Good
Overall - an ok drop....u had some good parts and some bad parts......try using multis more...and some parts of ur verse made no sense whatsoever.....

Rating:
7/10

peace
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