when an angel grabs the mic

i wonder what it sounds like
to hear an angel on the mic.......



i close my eyes
and i see angels and demons,
laughin and screamin,
but i can't figure out the meanin,
i wake up in a cold sweat,
relieved it was a dream
but i can't forget,
i'm paranoid
i feel like everybody's against me,
i got the devil in my face
and he's tryin to tempt me,
he won't let me,
out of his grip,
it gets tighter every second
and i can't take this shit,
can anybody tell me what's wrong,?
what the fuck is goin on,?
i turn on the radio
but it's the same old song,
nothing has changed ,
this world stays the same,
the stress racks my brain
til it drives me insane,
pushes me across the line,
look deeply and i'm sure you'll find,
i've given up hope,
sittin in a cloud of smoke,
listenin to my boy say " your rhymes are dope",
i cough , i choke,
i can't breath, my vision turns blue,
i hear my homeboy screamin
" what the fuck should i do?"
i see bright red, bright blue
flashin lights,
i picture my kid and my wife,
and then it all turns white,
that was just last night,
so i guess this is what it sounds like,
when an angel grabs the mic,


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it was cool it was more of a poem to me but it was aight it broke up just a lil at certain point but it was alright ohterwise

Yeah i agree this was alright here....structure in this was ok, your lines could have been a little longer i thought, cause they were kinda short though...probably should try to add some multies to this to help it out though...but overall this was ok...keep at it.

IMO, this was pretty good. I had strong sense of imagery whne reading this.
But the way you wrote this peice and just the overall flow of it, it seems more enjoable when read like a poem. It's more influential. Still it's pretty good. I can picture some one spittin this on a microphone rappin to it like twista or somethin.

not bad man keep it up ull get there lol or u allready ther 1 of the 2 lol nice work thoe

Dont up old stuff.